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Grim999

My desire is to become an author... this is the reason why I write, and I would love to hear your opinions about this fiction. as you can tell, English is not my first language... but I try to make as few grammatical mistakes as possible...that's about all I wanted to tell you... I wish you a pleasant day ahead.

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Vishisht_Magan

OMG THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE SHOUTOUT, you kinda got my name wrong but nevermind, THANK YOU SO MUCH, MAN I LOVED YOUR STORY AND I AM THANKFUL THAT MY VOTE HELPED, EVEN IF A LITTLE BIT, I HOPE YOU FINISH THIS STORY ONE DAY AND I PROMISE TO GIVE ALL THE POWER STONES I CAN

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I really like the concept of blending The castlevania series and the Harry Potter series because both of them are quite high on my list of favourite fantasy media.

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Grim999

I would appreciate an review, I honestly don't know if where the story is going is good or not...as I said, I want to become an author, and I am learning from this fiction, but I would appreciate it if you could tell me if I am doing well or not, and if not where should I improve... English is not my first language, it's my 4th, because of that I know there are some grammatical mistakes and I apologize...

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Vishisht_Magan

Ok, thank you for mentioning Lily, I can't wait to see Arthur interacting with Lily, please continue with the fanfic, I'm loving it very much, just wished the chapters were a bit longer, but honestly I am loving this, thank you so much. You are doing quite well for an amateur author, keep working hard, you will become a great author one day [img=recommend]

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Vishisht_Magan

When will we see Lily? I am curious as to what happened to her? Is she still Harry's mother? Does she miss Severus, does she regret choosing James over Severus?

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Vishisht_Magan

The updates are a bit irregular, but personally I am really invested in the story as it dives into a what-if scenario previously never looked into, Severus Snape is a complex character and it's nice to see him explored as a legend.

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Poison_Tester

Writing Quality- Doesn't really make the reader invested into the story. 3/5 Updates- Seems solid for now but too few chapters to tell. 5/5 Story- Very similar to most Harry Potter fanfictions and doesn't have anything unique to make it stand out truly. 2/5 MC- Not seeing anything unique still sadly. But again too few chapters to tell for now. 2/5 World Background- It's Harry Potter. 3/5 I wouldn't really say this is a must read but if you have some free time I would say check this book out. Overall 3/5.

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Vishisht_Magan

The chapter length has been short, Arthur is like a Gary Stu Malfoy felt OOC, and the OCs lack any contribution towards the story, but I think what your strengths are the OCs themselves, Iris feels like a great mentor and her feud with Dumbledore and Lily can be expanded on and while Elias may feel like a Ron, he is different in the way that he would be what you would expect from a side character that actually helps and contributes, sort of like Hermione but without the annoying traits, the mystery, suspense, and world-building, now I know Harry Potter is an already established world but your focus on the story of Arthur and the consequences of the actions of the previous generation we find out gradually, is impeccable. Let me know what type of Author you want to be and what your goals are, I might be able to help. I have deep knowledge regarding tropes.