The tale of the red death

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Ken_Uzumaki

Mc dope. Character is an Uzumaki which is dope. Mc has characteristics similar to a beta, never cares about that, some people might though just a warning. Plot starts out with shizune finding him and taking him after he gets ambushedwhen he awakens and tsunade adopts him. He then trains after 3 weeks. Hope this helps. Overalll cool story. I love it when Mc reminds me of me.

LV 3

hung_up_my_coat

plot holes ppl plot holes. the author has changed much of the plot but has the mc pretend that isnt the case too lol. the mc is also very arrogant, all the build up from the way he entered the world is wasted from what i can tell. i am surprised that he can fight orochimaru so well, ur sayinf he can stand up the hiruzen, after learning only swordsmanship for that long??? i guess we have to believe the mc gots talent, and lots of it. not very creative. and im sorry bud, but danzo isnt so arrogant and doesnt make decisona ao quickly. he hears tsunade has a kid, hed want information on him before tryna control him. control isnt a first thought, itd be information. he is a smart dangerous man. i dont even belive that he would even confront jiriya and tsunade about it. hed press the council on his down time. tsunade an jirya dont just get a say u know, there is a council because one person isnt allowes to make all the decision. u wrote a baffoon out of danzo. i dont like him, but u didnt write him. 2+/5 , its below average, with bad character building and a messier world building than before( that makes less sense than naruto itself); oh and author ptsd isnt some joke that ninjas cant have tf!! its so real that ive seen grown men cry on the internet with other soliders saying they are there for one another. and these arwnt soliders who know each other they arw just other random soliders on the internet. so no tsunade would freak th out after she say that kid, anko prob wont bring him to her, tsunade isnt some saint u know ... she isnt gonna just heal some random kid, i mean she doesnt even care about the senjus much less an uzumaki.

LV 13

AlmightyMe

Red Death is the name of a DC character so it's confusing if you name it that. So I suggest you rename it. Also nice writing skills I enjoyed reading the book a lot.

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holosagewolf32

so far its great but white streaks? what other clan is he part of that can influence his hair??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????

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Tugsoo

for a first chapter it's not bad compared to other fanfics. i will change my review accordingly in the future ✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌