(Hiatus) Restaurant of the Devourer

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Jaxxson

Hi, I'm the author. This is my first novel and I'm writing it for fun as a winter break activity. Please share any comments about the novel that you want me to know and I'll try to improve my writing. I hope that you'll enjoy this sci-fi, cultivation, cooking novel.

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Ethan132

Avery wholesome story, with nice charcter development, smooth transitions, amazing world building AND no grammer mistakes in sight!!! Woohooo :) loving the novel so far, definatly worth a read in my opinion. thank you author :)

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TaintedMetal

Although I have been on this platform for months, this is my first review concerning a cultivation like novel, and one of the few reviews of eastern fantasy. This is mainly because many of them feature similar plots involving bullied/orphan/weak heroes going on a heroic and self building journey (also they tend to be fantastically long, and I simply can't put that much time into reading such long stories.) I'll start with the pros. It's nice to see great deal for such a fantasy, both in telling and showing. The writing is nice and easy to follow. Very little mistakes in grammar, but these mistakes do not heavily affect the reading experience. Writing structure however, there were many huge paragraphs starting from Chapter 2, which I think can be easily solved if they are spaced out. One of my biggest criticisms is the story itself. I appreciate that it's not another isekai/reincarnation tale, but where exactly is this idea of a being making a restaurant going. The concept and ideas alone are unique, but where the story goes on from there is what makes me confused. Keep on writing author. I myself may need time to grasp your story but for those eastern fantasy fans out there, give this a shot.

Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.