My blood is from Krypton, but I'm in Marvel. (Temporary pause.)

LV 5

Cardinal_Harb

The MC knows and feels bad about his adoptive parents financial situation, yet despite his genius level intellect, he's a pizza delivery boy/ eye candy for the customers. At school, he complains that the students are afraid of him and that he has no girlfriend or even friends, yet when the chance comes to get a friend and possibly the best girlfriend, he acts like an emo b****. He has future knowledge, yet for his 16 years of his new life, he did nothing about it. To sum it up so far, the MC is a loner emo b****

LV 6

InHisName

The characterisation is all over the place. One minute the protagonist behaves like a child, the next a teenager craving social acknowledgement, and the very next like as if wary adult - and then suddenly his mentality regresses again to a child. Considering this is a protagonist-driven story, this becomes truly painful. Important notes to make. For one, the MC was 19 years old when he died. He has the intelligence of Superman - which is to say, he's basically a walking supercomputer. This should be the very basics of characterisation for the protagonist. Instead, over and over again...the MC makes the worst choice.

LV 5

mikedanger

Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.

LV 5

Ballad

This is your typical Cliche Marvel Superman Build story it's Cringy Angsty Edgy and Dumb. MC Reincarnated and was Adopted by Parker Family Wow so Original like that hasn't been done by 99% of Authors He's a The Typical Hero Wannabe as usual and of course MC had to go with the With Great Power comes great responsibility garbage honestly idk why people write these stories their all Copies of each other with nothing original, Now I know I'm sounding toxic but I'm just being truthful The grammar is ok and that's about it.

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LV 15

dope_is_my_name

Yea this rating is really a 1 star too many plot holes, so many inconsistencies, grammar issuses are a plenty, story is bland mc literally dumbest ive seen so far very disappointing good luck author

LV 13

Talleyrand

To be followed with care and caution . The story has good potential, like making the mc an ultra rich guy in 2 minutes and he's so far not a young master who jumps on every woman he sees. Author-San, please don't do harem. Please focus on the character development and his relationships, how he will affect the Mcu. Don't make him stone-cold insensitive either, it's fine for a secondary character but a main character must have his own personality even if he makes mistakes, it's human. Inspired by the real superman (movies or comics) and ask yourself why he became a superhero, what makes him act, how does he live in a world made of paper for him. If you push this reflection, you have a way to make an excellent story. These are just tips, you can take them if you want I don't care, it's not my fanfic.

LV 11

Megamind2

mc is both smart and dumb he has power and intellect but doesn't use them to their full advantage. so what if he has a kryptonian body he still needs to know how to fight. he is nigh Invincible not Invincible. his parents are poor but surely with his intellect hiding who he is while making their lives comfortable should be easy. mc has no clear path. no ambition. if things keep up like this mc must realise people around him will get hurt. i like that he is op but not ridiculously op so he has room for growth

LV 4

dozkiller07

I think the author has a good plot in his hand but don't know how to carry the strory there. the worst think about this fic is mc. he act like an emo edgelord.the worst thing a mc can be. he said he goes to school to make friends and all and to be normal. but the next sec he destroyed and tramutised a bully kid.now everyone is afraid of him.so no normal highscool life. then many girls try to be friends with him but he act like a di ck and ignore all people.i don't know how that can give u friends. his action and words are all different

LV 4

colettes

i dont like me personally. . . .

LV 2

Demon_queen

And so, in my eternal search for something to read, I came across this work. The beginning is a little confusing, very quickly skipped the topic with his reincarnation, but not bad. Well, the classics, ROB, reincarnation, "random" and so on. The protagonist. Kryptonian, a genius race, developed LOL in 5 days and he did nothing for 16 years. Okay, until 14 you can still say something, little boy, a lot of problems (well, who will hire an 8-year-old child) but then ... And behavior. Even if you're a reincarnation, an incident with that guy, a deteriorating reputation, a force hit in the head, it happens. But you were an ordinary guy, you obviously won't act like a Sasuke when meeting a character like Felicia. Yes, I've finished reading and I know that he is getting better, but how could he even get a job as a pizza delivery man, with poor parents, when his potential are so obvious? Well, that sincere surprise when he thought that he was the cause of Reed's death. Well seriously, he kept below the grass, quieter than the water, how was he supposed to affect? It is more obvious that due to the fact that there are not fours here, but also a bunch of other worlds, something will change in their overlap. It's good that at least he wore a mask. In general, I can recommend to increase dialogues and interaction between the character, it is not very noticeable that they are alive. And so, above average, you can read. When moral growth occurs, there must be one satisfaction to read. 6,5/10 Special thanks to Google translator for help in translating

LV 4

PickleMe

Tbh this story speaks to me of a newbie writer with passion, it has its good point but so glaring in front is bad points The plot is basically written on the spot, the characters seem less real due to no knowledge or whatever reason. I love the idea and part of the execution but the rest is horrible i feel like if given proper planning this could be a gem. I am sorry author for my harsh words but i really wish this story improves cuz i believe it can be much more than superkid in marvel. What you need right now is a good base of marve characters and redesigning mc to suit your plot, anotger thing is you need an editor friend or a read checker. Best of luck

LV 5

In_destructible

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LV 14

Gotha

Has a lot of potentials and the MC won't help every damsel he can find. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

LV 1

LordPuska

The story is interesting, has its own unique plot, of course it is not perfect, but which of us is ideal. I want to say that you do not stop there, I liked the story you wrote and I will be very happy waiting for the next update from you. I also want to thank you in advance for your efforts, I hope this story will not end quickly. I hope my words have encouraged you to move further towards this goal. thanks

LV 4

soubhik05

Overall a good novel so Far. with improvements in grammar it would be perfect. Just don’t add cliche such as Training with ancient one. superman necer trained in his entire life and also did not know fully about his poweRs but he is still one of the most OP hero even with kriptonite and magic in the way so our mc will be fine as well and also training and techniques are needed for those who are week. have you ever seen Saitama or Superman train under someone. They don’t need it because their casual puch can not be stopped or followed by others. Simply they are too fast and strong. Also without Kriptonite he is literally unstoppable in marvel unless he meets cosmic beings but for that you can try to give Him an evolution direction of superman prime one million where in he absorbs some sun like dimension for millions of years as the Time difference in different dimensions and main universe is different so it can seamlessly merge with the story flow Keep it up 👍

LV 1

In_Ya

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LV 3

Kal_Thanatos

I re-read this fan-fic from the start but this time I was drunk as f**k and trust me I enjoy it very much because I was able to relate to mc, MC was making the same choices I would make after two bottles of vodka cheers fellows!

LV 1

nicolas_gonzalez_5220

Para empesar estoy un poco decepcionado con esto las baces son buenas pero el resto quedo cojo, el mc que es un rencarnador deja mucho que decear es bastante erratico en personalidad y caracter no de buena manera si me entiendes y sinceramente senti como si perforaran la personalidad de un chuni con la de spiderman y superman pero atenuaran los rasgos buenos y le quitaran sentido a la historia. Creo que una reescritura quitando los actos de verguenza , poniendo mas informacion en la historia para que sea menos plana y elegir un metodo de escribir y señirce a el durante arcos o facetas lo aria menos erratico y mas logico sobre todo si se explica un poco la personalidad y como se desarroya con su entorno y capacidades a lo largo de la historia lo arian genial y mucho menos pesado a la hora de leer. Suerte y espero que te lo tomes bien. Español.