Fate's Grasp

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Dissociation

~Insert Shameless Author comment~ Hey guys! This is my first time writing a full length novel, and it's the product of various ideas and smaller (800 word) stories I've written in the past. I've also gotten inspiration from all corners of the world! Including, but not limited to: - Anime (Mushoku, A Certain Magical Index) - Manga (Tensura, A Wild Last Boss Has Appeared) - Other Novels (The Beginning After the End, The Stormlight Archive) - News - Brain-picking some friends - Games (PSO2:NG, DND) - Dreams Thanks for everyone who's supporting me; both current, past and future~

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Nyamao

The plot of the book is amazing. The storyline is catchy and the begining of the story got me hooked. Would love to read more if the book so am adding it to my library so I can get regular updates . Good work.

Well, here i am. You wanted a review so i gave it. Overall score: 4/5. The story is good so far, the grammar and syntax have little to no errors, the characters.. ill talk about further down, and the general idea is a solid one. While its good, it has room to grow and its still a fledgling novel. World building (also genre/topic because i want to): 4/5. I love a good betrayal story, couple that with whats shaping up to be an isekai and you have a story I'll thoroughly enjoy. So long as it isn't written like a 3rd grader, which its not! So you win. Good style, they mesh well, it has lots of story options available to the writer. The world building is good, it’s interesting and is backed by a solid story concept. Some vague details need cleared up but since the novels only 6 chapters in I’m not too worried. The only concern I would have for world building is if it keeps switch location every chapter, there will eventually need to be a more permanent location that the plot can utilize, unless the plot is about nomads. Which its not. I think. Story score: 3/5. Now before i talk about the story itself let me preface, at the time of writing this there are a total of 6 chapters released. I do not like judging the story off such a small amount of chapters, however, i was asked to write a review, however indirectly it may have been... The story is fine, but lackluster, 6 chapters in we have reached what seems to be the end of the initial character expositions and the beginning of a first arc of the story, it's been done well up until now but without the presence of any consequential plot threads (save 1 or 2 regarding the MC's) My real issue with the story is the way terms are thrown into sentences with no real explanation. In one part we hear "Dark Vin" and "Light Vin". I assumed this is some form of power system for the world, but thats still only an assumption. Throwing in unexplained terms does work, like if the MC didn't know either, and then later both the reader and MC learned together, but just having them there and then not get touched on again feels awkward and breaks the flow of reading, as you pause and think "wait, what?" Grammar: 4/5. It's fine, I've seen one or two errors here or there. But it reads fine, the vocabulary of the author is fairly large so you aren't always getting the same exact words over and over. Easy 4. Characters: 4/5. The characters are easily my favorite part so far, assasins are like the literary version of my sweet tooth and the two main characters seem, well, like people. The dialogue is (mostly) natural, and doesn't sound robotic or forced, the thought processes of the characters aren't super simplified or awkward, but they complement the line of work the characters are in. My only issue with the characters so far, is introducing, naming and giving personalities to characters who immediately get ripped away from the reader. It feels shallow, like they were there solely because the plot called for it, and it was unnecessary to flesh them out at all. Of course, should these characters be seen later in the novel, that can be fixed. However, for now, I can't say I'm a fan of that. Let me finally touch on Aeryn and Lewis, our two MC's and frankly, the only characters i care about currently. Aeryn is the tough, tempered female assassin who had a monarch to kill and Lewis is the cool, and collected commander (hes still an assassin) employed by the emperor. During the novel it seems to hint that Aeryn and Lewis will meet, hopefully soon. Otherwise it may be a dreary start to a story with potential. I think the two MC's are good, somewhat the saving grace of the characters rating in general. While both are fairly sterotypical at the moment they have a lot of time to develop, what we've seen of them though makes them feel human, Lewis is tricked, and falls into a trap with his team, and Aeryn runs headfirst into a trap for her, and is overpowered. These characters show moments of weakness, which is essential for character development and the main reason I'm giving the characters category a 4th star. The character development is there, and I hope the author seizes their chance to develop these characters well.

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shxdowdino

Chapter 5! Since my first review, I've been noticing how the book has much more to offer than I thought. Obviously I don't want to spoil anything, so- Ill just say this: The novel is the type to keep you on your toes anticipating for whatever happens next, I’m 100% sure that this novel will stay interesting for hundreds of more chapters to come and I can't wait to see everything progress until then. The character design and their backstories, the dozens of point of views in the first 5 chapters alone, the environment, the world building, and the feeling that the novel gives off. All of these things are just more of a reason for me to want to read this novel and interact with its growing community. It continues, even at chapter 5, to not be overly generic compared to other novels and still has a unique taste that most novels and comics nowadays don't have, at all. Overall, this novel is one of the better ones I've read and I as well as many others are enjoying it as well. I strongly recommend that all of you give this novel the chance it deserves, as it is a really good thing to read.

This novel shows great potential. Each chapter I read I get sucked further in, proving the quality of the writing and story development. Fate’s Grasp shows the attributes I look for when reading something new, and I can recommend it without hesitation. I look forward to future chapter instalments.

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Juliet_Omuadona

Thrilling, the story had me glued to my screen, the mystery and the characters. Although it's just a few chapters, I can tell that it will be worth the read [img=recommend][img=recommend]

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lohse_

So far, the novel has a lot of dialogue, and is told form many different characters' perspectives. Any transitions between character viewpoints are noted, as are notes of when events occur, making the story easy to follow. Well done! Seems like an exciting novel! I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.

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shxdowdino

A well written first chapter of an extraordinary novel in the making. The story is well thought out, and skillfully woven together in a gracious fashion. The phrasing leaves you interested, and the pacing feels just right. Fate’s Grasp is undoubtedly worth your time.

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0Mashroom

this ia a decent read thw author really made a great job writing the dialogues, not really a fun of multiple Pov but still this works [img=recommend]

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Miss_Asriya

I personally love fantasy novels, and if you guys love one too, this novel is great to add to your collections. The story and the narrative are fine, the pacing is great too enough for the readers to understand what is happening. Plus, the synopsis itself is catchy. Keep it up author! Great Job.