Saiyan in Smallville

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Shane_Town

I had really high hopes for this since I love Smallville, and Saiyans but this...it destroys both with a template system, and bringing in characters like Brightburn, Homelander, Black Goku and various other's. like seriously the guy is a Saiyan theirs literally zero need for a template system, it completely destroys a Saiyan character to me.I've written some pretty cringe stuff, but certain parts of this blows me away, at the level of cringe that has been reached. If you want to burn some time you can read this, though you might have some trouble following it since it's very...convoluted. With that said Author I like your idea, not your execution of it, honestly the template system really ruins it for me so does the inclusion of a god-like power leveled character in chapter 8. I hope you explore the financial issues of the Kent family with raising two sons instead of one since in the series they struggle to keep the farm with just Clark.

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Maury_Rodriguex

The main problem of this story it’s just too fast like he killed off both homelander and brightburn in like two chapters and a chapter later the smallvile plots starts to occur. And it’s like we don’t even get enough time with our mc like how is he dealing with being dead and not seeing his loved ones again. Yeah nope it was like (bam) you now are a saiyan train and go fight bad guys. So if you want to read a story where the mc gets too strong in the beginning and starts to get even more powers from different characters like Mark Greyson from invincible and making him so OP that nothing will challenge and if it does it is just plot then this is the story for you.

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dragon_shot

I think it has potential. It good so far a bit to fast if progress

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God_of_hentai

i havent read yet but im imagining just two separate ships crash land at different times and the clarks are just somehow at both lol

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Ts_1378

He just needs a magic template and he’s got everything covered. Good luck keep writing.