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Ivory once was a blessed girl who flourished in the wealth of her parents. However, once the cleaners arrived with an attack on her hometown, she was left as the only survivor. The threat still lingers but everyone seems to have brushed it off, Ivory however seems to have been indoctrinated with cleaner beliefs: she starts showing characteristics alike to theirs.
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[From: The Best Review Swap - Proofreading and Feedback] There is few chapters for me to form a good feedback about the story itself, so I'll focus on other points that could be reviewed to improve even more this novel. Writing Quality: It lacks three important points, structure of the sentences, remove redundancy and adjust the pacing, flow. What I mean by that is: The flow is somewhat disrupted by complex sentences that might require unpacking. Shorter, punchier sentences could be used to punctuate the MC's stark realizations and inner thoughts could be a good way to do it. Stability of Updates: I don't really judge this part, because myself have problems with this xD. Story Development: With only two chapters I can't judge it, but its showing a good premisse. Character Design: Good point here, in the second chapter. With the First POV, its a good way to describe and give more flesh to the character.
Hey there. Because this story has only two chaps out, I can't truly appreciate the work as well as give a larger review. So for now, this is all I can give. Writing quality seems okay for me... 4 Stars... Stability of updates? I have problems with it as well so I will not judge that. Everyone out there has days when nothing comes to our minds. Story developments seem interesting, like the POV of the Protagonist in the sec Chap... The character design seems okay for now. To develop a character, you need more than one chap so, I can't tell yet if it's really good or nah... World back... seems good as well. For now, Hospital is the main target, while we had a small introduction of Ivory's ruined town with cleaners lurking around. All in all, the novels looks good for now, so what about adding new chaps?