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it is about a world where technology was able to make people from age 20 years and older become immortal it angered the gods so the gods decided to take the souls of the people that took the drug that made them immortal the body will leave without knowing there souls was taken but the souls will take trial's to get there body's back have their powers they acquired or become gods but people die in this trails for the entertainment of the gods and gods will scheme there way to kill this souls but the mc didn't like this world so he will find an another worlds
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Tags: multiverse | world-hopping | gods
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I would personally give this story a 4/5. You can see that the story is gradually getting better after chapter 4. Since I've only read the first five chapters I don't have much to say for the character design. I really like the world background and think that it's pretty cool. I would give the writing quality a 1.5/5 because of the punctuation issues, this caused a lot of comprehension issues and made the story over all harder to understand. There is a lot of places where I think needs commas and periods. Other than the punctuation and some small spelling issues, I think that the story is really good.
The spelling, the punctuation, and the entire presentation of this story are an utter mess. Normally I'd take one glance at writing like this, and move on, not wanting to waste time attempting to read something that, rather than excitement or wonder, would only induce headaches. In this case, however, I came to this story with the sole intention of reading it and giving my opinion as was asked in the thread you posted. If you do decide to continue and have any expectation of a good feeling from your readers I implore you please run this (and future chapters) through an editor or a free online grammar checker (for example the one on writer.com).