Cursed Eyes (Itachi in JJk)

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STJSociety

The concept of this fanfic is honestly phenomenal, and the execution at the start is a solid 9/10. It is very rare with these characters in another world work well, but the author seamlessly integrated Itachi into the jjk world amazingly. He is also spot on with Itachi's personality and strength, another factor a lot of authors tend to get wrong in fics like these also. Honestly, I would give this a 5/5, but sadly all things come with problems. First off, the formatting is off, spacing is wrong in some places, commas just aren't where they are supposed to be, and sometimes there is just missing punctuation. Although, there is very little grammar mistakes to be seen which is a great thing. Second, the chapters are short, and as a fanfic writer myself who is about to publish, I can tell he writes the chapter then splits them up into shorter lengths to pad the chapter number. The authors plays into webnovels algorithm, but it messes up the stories flow a lot. Lastly, the pace is wierd, I cant really put my finger on it but if you read it I think you will understand what I mean. That's pretty much this fanfic's biggest down fall. If the author gets an editor or friend to help and makes the conversations, scene transtions, and POV switches better this could be one of the best fanfics and definitely the best jjk fanfics out there. Good luck author, hope you continue, and thanks to whoever read this review. Give it a shot.

LV 4

tALvaNCH

A JJK,Naruto, and Itachi wet dream. It is so good that I got addicted and want to see more!

LV 4

gaurav_Kumar_1424

Author has grasped Itachi's character quite nicely. First two chapter were a bit confusing and hard to understand type for me but after that it steadly got better and then its nothing but pleasure. I would appreciate it more if you involved his finger flicks on forehead instead of hand holding with maid.

LV 14

The_8th_king

It started of good but then you made itach go out of character making him a grown man behave like a bottled up 8 year old and addicting the little brother role passively. SO THANKS A LOT FOR RUINING SOMETHING GOOD

LV 4

David_555

This is amazing. One ☝🏻 f the best JJk fanfics out there even from the start. I hope the author doesn’t drop this because I see so much potential.

LV 14

duke112332112332

If I could rate this story more than the allotted five stars, I would—in a heartbeat. I stumbled across this fanfic on AO3 and was blissfully—and I do mean blissfully—ecstatic to see it updated here. I must say, this author has done a beautiful job at crafting characters that inspire you to want to read. Not only because of the plot—and dare I say, wow, you have killed it in this regard—but because of the living, breathing, and multidimensional characters. You make our hearts yearn for their survival, triumph, and some—their downfall. That is what separates mediocre writers from the talents. And you, my dear friend, are *not* mediocre. I have noticed some readers have found the pacing to be slow, but I have to disagree in this regard vehemently. This is what happens when people become too used to eating $5 takeout and don’t have the aptitude to recognize the filet mignon sitting in front of them, practically begging to be devoured. To build a story, you must have characters the readers root for (hate is also an option). It’s not all about cursed techniques, flashy abilities, or even anime-level fights. It’s the characters who go through those experiences that make us beg for an update. (I could expound for hours on character, so I’ll digress) Author, your prose is beautiful. One tell-tell sign of a beginner or amateur writer is dialogue/action tags. The way you seamlessly move the conversations from one character to the next, one scene to the next, is masterful. Kudos to you. Let me offer an example from this story, chapter 21 -TEXT INSERT START- [As they walked up the stairs, she realized that, unfortunately for the image in her head, he was the man and the living legend all in one. Although she had lost most of the respect, she had come to rate the man just after minutes with him. “Then he said, 'You won’t be alone for long.' Can you believe it? My cute little Jiki-kun. Now he’s all grown up and doesn't even bother to call me when taking on centuries-old threats. Oh, the horror.” He ended and started cleaning away fake tears.”] -TEXT INSERT END- You beautifully shifted the scene, realizing that conversations are fluid and do not all begin at the top of the topic. Gojo and Maki have, in this case, been walking and talking for a minute now. For you to understand that the conversation has been occurring before the scene began for the readers and to showcase this beautifully speaks volumes of your writing prowess. This scene also wonderfully depicts how much Gojo—even in his whimsical way—cherishes and respects his cute little Jiki-kun (aka Itachi). I could go on and on, but I want to end with this. Author, you are doing a fantastic job, and this fanfic is truly a gift to us all. But please be cautious of reading reviews and comments because they can be momentum killers. The most unfounded and uneducated critique of your work—even when you know it holds no weight—can indeed negatively affect your headspace. If you can, have family or friends screen the comments and feedback to save yourself unnecessary grief. So, in conclusion—plus 10 points for reading this far—keep up the great work. Even if you don’t finish this story and move along to something else, I wish you nothing but the best.

LV 2

ShriNG

"I must say, it's a really wonderful novel, but having it once a week is a bit tedious. I hope the author doesn't give up on this story..................

LV 4

HOLY_BOB

Suddenly after 10 chapters I remembered that there is Naruto manga in jjk. So is it going to be like that or is it au without Naruto manga? And it is a good ff though i kinda feel that some stuff are forced but it is passable .

LV 4

Lone_Philosopher

Ameterasu, Susanoo, Tsukiyomi, Izanami, Izanagi... His domain expansion should be called Shinto Shrine...

LV 11

Mysteries_

The author forgot to put it in the tag but I warn you that this is a complete slice of life, if you are expecting action or new things you will be disappointed, I think this fanfic is only suitable for a specific group of people

LV 13

Mr_copy_your_story

Great fanfic even tho this is the first couple of chapters I hope the author don’t drop it.

LV 14

foxyweirdo

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LV 1

MenzoSama

Its actually a great read, but like .. the update us super slow .. 21 chaps in 7 months! ........... ......................... ................ ................................... .......................... ........................................ ..........................

LV 12

Fate32

Love were its going pls keep it up author

LV 1

Loading989

Very interesting and well-written fan fiction! I express my deep gratitude to the author for his story. The whole fight with Toji hoped that Itachi would not kill him, because it would really be very strange, and the author not only did not kill him later with the help of Gojo, but also left him alive, which changed the canon!

LV 3

Drimy

Enjoying it so far! My only critique really is to update it more regularly if possible. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

LV 4

_Doom

The story is slow-paced, unless there's a time skip. The vibe is similar to that of chinese fan fiction, maybe it's just me.

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Donatello_Santile

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LV 4

Sun_Wukong_6969

itachi in jjk will be a monster as sorcerer needs a strong philosophy and conviction. Which is fabulously filled in itachi's character