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4 chapters in and i'm already giving up. shot ton of plot holes, characters and story development are bland af. the writing quality isn't the worst ever but it's still not the best. and the story is super rushed with it being mostly narration with some rare conversations here and there which aren't any good. And to top it off let's dtart giving everyone else super strong bloodlines to cover up their blandness. all in all i wouldn't recommend putting time into it.
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You don't need a system in dbz, you can just wish for the ability to create and administer system from a dragon.You don't need to be born as anything special nor do you need anything else than to make a few wish to get them all. Also there is no function from a system that you couldn't get from magic you can learn from kami, baba, guru, kaio, kaioshin,whis, etc... You can get high magic potential from a wish too.There is no reason to be born with a system. And that's the only complain I have with this fanfic, other than that, it's an ok I guess.
maybe he should have choosed Broly since hes a legendary super saiyan lol im still in chapter one so dont blame me broly is the best choice to take instead of goku Borly is a natural inborn talent
"....Goku had just opened his eyes and saw a rough looking person somewhat handsome but also animalistic it was Yamcha the one who got killed by a Saibamen, Goku recently found out about his ability to copy and paste others abilities bloodlines etc Yamcha was the perfect target, he wanted to see if he gave him Instant Mastery how powerful he would become....." thank you, I'll drop it after that
Was fantastic up til you sent to DxD tbh. Thanks for the reading experience my dude. Hope you write another story because when you get going you have good sauce in your food. 👌
This was an interesting story and showed lots of potential in all the non sayians and all the characters in general i like it an it was a good first try for the author
That copy and paste ability made me drop. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
This story is good at the start other than some eastern elements like qi,Phoenix. Mc give gifts to other bloodline and abilities just cuz they are z warriors, if he give it to his women and friends that ok but to yamcha with the excuse as trial Anyway I dont like these kindof gifting abilities and bloodline ****.
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The story is good but when you begin give other bloodline it ruined everything.....but other than that everything good...........................................................
I love your novel ......................................................... It’s great and I enjoy it a lot ........................................ And love the story development and diffrent realms he goes to .................................................................. Hope you don’t drop and continue to update
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The start was kinda alright but he got powerful Too Fast! The system is **** tho (The mc rarely interacted with the system(from my view, maybe i'm blind). The writing quality is okay, the stability of updates not so great, story development (?) Is there even a story? The character has no true motivation (becoming the strongest is really short as he became the strongest). I don't know about world background tho... It's basically the same but few minor changes like krillin being a saiyan and mc marrying bulma instead of vegeta. What put me off is that mc when he travels to other worlds he's in a different character's body and that he's in some of them, in other protagonists bodies, shouldn't he be just goku not issei, not ichigo. He is just goku. It's your book author you have your *******, I'm just giving you criticism (I'm an author as well and I know how it feels to write a book). (Advice) Don't drop just create an event which makes a great change and balances it out e.g. A supreme being forces him to reincarnate as goku again but this time he's not going to get all the good stuff, no bloodlines, no molecular level regeneration so that an enemy has a chance of killing him, so that it raises stakes higher. Just Saiyan LOL
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Good beginning and good potential, but felt rushed and character development degenerated. I felt like you just kept on adding overpowered abilities and switching worlds for 'story progression', which wouldn't have been wrong if you brought out each franchise to it's full ability. For example: A goku with a LSSJ Broly bloodline is awesome, but your very regular GACHA lottery and instant mastery meant Goku couldn't train to master the forms and to gain experience against similar level enemies. Bringing in Naruto abilities was redundant with Super Saiyan transformations unless your character creates his ownversion of sage mode via spirit energy (from the spirit ball techniques), and so on. Your effort at bringing the other Z-fighters up a power-level tier via Copy&Paste is admirable but ruined the story, when you could have improved their character development to do the same. Improving the romantic development between the MC and his women is optional, but for two strong-willed women to consent to polygamy without furthering their character development made the story more of a 'fancy'. Switching to TDG world was redundant with different energy systems and with saiyans already having their hereditary 'great ape spirit'. The TDG power gained was unnecessary for a saiyan and may have even weakened them. Instead, it made the story plot uncertain and undecided. The Dragon Ball plotline up to Super felt as an afterthought between all the world-switching. Overall, it has great ideas, but constant new OP abilities with a lack of character development and a direction for the plot ruined your MC's martial way.
4 chapters in and i'm already giving up. shot ton of plot holes, characters and story development are bland af. the writing quality isn't the worst ever but it's still not the best. and the story is super rushed with it being mostly narration with some rare conversations here and there which aren't any good. And to top it off let's dtart giving everyone else super strong bloodlines to cover up their blandness. all in all i wouldn't recommend putting time into it.
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You don't need a system in dbz, you can just wish for the ability to create and administer system from a dragon.You don't need to be born as anything special nor do you need anything else than to make a few wish to get them all. Also there is no function from a system that you couldn't get from magic you can learn from kami, baba, guru, kaio, kaioshin,whis, etc... You can get high magic potential from a wish too.There is no reason to be born with a system. And that's the only complain I have with this fanfic, other than that, it's an ok I guess.
maybe he should have choosed Broly since hes a legendary super saiyan lol im still in chapter one so dont blame me broly is the best choice to take instead of goku Borly is a natural inborn talent
"....Goku had just opened his eyes and saw a rough looking person somewhat handsome but also animalistic it was Yamcha the one who got killed by a Saibamen, Goku recently found out about his ability to copy and paste others abilities bloodlines etc Yamcha was the perfect target, he wanted to see if he gave him Instant Mastery how powerful he would become....." thank you, I'll drop it after that
Was fantastic up til you sent to DxD tbh. Thanks for the reading experience my dude. Hope you write another story because when you get going you have good sauce in your food. 👌
This was an interesting story and showed lots of potential in all the non sayians and all the characters in general i like it an it was a good first try for the author
That copy and paste ability made me drop. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
This story is good at the start other than some eastern elements like qi,Phoenix. Mc give gifts to other bloodline and abilities just cuz they are z warriors, if he give it to his women and friends that ok but to yamcha with the excuse as trial Anyway I dont like these kindof gifting abilities and bloodline ****.
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The story is good but when you begin give other bloodline it ruined everything.....but other than that everything good...........................................................
I love your novel ......................................................... It’s great and I enjoy it a lot ........................................ And love the story development and diffrent realms he goes to .................................................................. Hope you don’t drop and continue to update
I don see nothing bad about this novel,I don't understand why people say it bad. ....... ........... ................ ..................... .......................... ................................ ..................................... ...........................................
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The start was kinda alright but he got powerful Too Fast! The system is **** tho (The mc rarely interacted with the system(from my view, maybe i'm blind). The writing quality is okay, the stability of updates not so great, story development (?) Is there even a story? The character has no true motivation (becoming the strongest is really short as he became the strongest). I don't know about world background tho... It's basically the same but few minor changes like krillin being a saiyan and mc marrying bulma instead of vegeta. What put me off is that mc when he travels to other worlds he's in a different character's body and that he's in some of them, in other protagonists bodies, shouldn't he be just goku not issei, not ichigo. He is just goku. It's your book author you have your *******, I'm just giving you criticism (I'm an author as well and I know how it feels to write a book). (Advice) Don't drop just create an event which makes a great change and balances it out e.g. A supreme being forces him to reincarnate as goku again but this time he's not going to get all the good stuff, no bloodlines, no molecular level regeneration so that an enemy has a chance of killing him, so that it raises stakes higher. Just Saiyan LOL
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Good beginning and good potential, but felt rushed and character development degenerated. I felt like you just kept on adding overpowered abilities and switching worlds for 'story progression', which wouldn't have been wrong if you brought out each franchise to it's full ability. For example: A goku with a LSSJ Broly bloodline is awesome, but your very regular GACHA lottery and instant mastery meant Goku couldn't train to master the forms and to gain experience against similar level enemies. Bringing in Naruto abilities was redundant with Super Saiyan transformations unless your character creates his ownversion of sage mode via spirit energy (from the spirit ball techniques), and so on. Your effort at bringing the other Z-fighters up a power-level tier via Copy&Paste is admirable but ruined the story, when you could have improved their character development to do the same. Improving the romantic development between the MC and his women is optional, but for two strong-willed women to consent to polygamy without furthering their character development made the story more of a 'fancy'. Switching to TDG world was redundant with different energy systems and with saiyans already having their hereditary 'great ape spirit'. The TDG power gained was unnecessary for a saiyan and may have even weakened them. Instead, it made the story plot uncertain and undecided. The Dragon Ball plotline up to Super felt as an afterthought between all the world-switching. Overall, it has great ideas, but constant new OP abilities with a lack of character development and a direction for the plot ruined your MC's martial way.