Evolving lich rewritten

LV 15

Pragmatico

Read what has been released ( chapter 26) for a reference point. Grammar needs a lot of work. After a period you put space before starting the next sentence. Use a thesaurus to make the story colorful instead of using the same word every time. Also the story has no world building so far. You state there is a city but not what direction or the distance between two places so we are totally in the dark. You also need to explain what your rankings mean such and c class and b class and the levels of each class like low mid high and peak. I do like the plot so far but the stories flow is ruined by the grammar at the moment. Hope you fix the errors and take my suggestions serious so your story can flourish. Also the MC is lacking a back story or anything that the readers can relate to i understand undead don’t have emotions but he needs to connect with the readers on some level

LV 14

Asterrod

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