Synopsis
Your first love the hardest one to forget.
So this is a story of a man's first love
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Your grammar is a bit hard to understand. Your story should have a bit more details of the surroundings. Characterโs names?? I loved the short story, it just needs a bit more grammar and a few strokes of names, aura, facial expression, clothing, details of area, and separations of paragraphs.
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