Haikyuu: Demon

LV 3

VILLIAN_MAKER

I mean it, you need to use Capital Letters before any sentence. The paragraphs are mess up, half sentence up while half sentence on the next line. Many mistakes, almost no world background for now. I don't see MC as a real Character yet. And how to write the characters speak is so cringe. I hope you can edit your chapters, read them yourself ones. Let's see if you improve after my review.

LV 1

Yunoo_Qtt

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