I chose to be a barista.

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H0Nored1

Hello I am the author of "I chose to be a barista."! This is my first ACTUAL novel and as a newbie author, I would appreciate any kind of constructive criticism, tips and positve reviews in general! Please enjoy this new series with me and watch me grow as an author and writer!

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Laziest_Pillow

Well, t his story is average. There isn't much going on thus far, and the beginning is very convoluted and poorly written, although not intentional, as what happens is hard to follow. Elaborating on that part in specific, it is poorly written in the sense that the actions are depicted but you don't feel like they are "happening", as if they were a summary of something bigger. The scenes of Klodian interacting with the girl at the start, the people in the bar, and the fight are hard to follow. The fact that the chapters I read (until the author updates or changes them) have so many sections in bold makes it a little hard to read, while a whole chapter is written in bold. Going with the plot, like many stories I read, everything feels "handed" to the MC, the fact he is a prodigy, how the story unfolds and people like him for existing and his potential. The secret S-class Barista, the soul mate thing... it feels forced. It feels as if he is a Mary Sue with the universe conspiring in his favor. The story is not bad not good right now, but it is in the beginning, many mistakes can be waved off in the future as "poor early writing" until the author rewrites it. Another problem is the pacing, the story feels very fast-paced and with little to no explanation in between (again, not in a good way or intentional one), because of how "summary-like" some chapters, without time to properly elaborate and expand on necessary things like the lore and what is happening at large. This is it, for now.