Jujutsu Kaisen : Legacy of the Senju

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Victor_Venegas

Ok, I have a problem with the novel, the interactions of the characters are robotic, there is no feeling behind the dialogues, an example of this is the death of the protagonist's parents, both times, in the same chapter, it is just these characters warning that they are going to die like "I'm going to die, ok?" which removes absolutely all the weight behind the "event". Furthermore, the pace of the novel feels extremely rushed from one moment to the next, there are jumps of events without any type of development. Also from time to time there is a focus on things not very relevant to the general immersion of the novel, again for example, in the same chapter as the last example the protagonist creates a wooden dragon to test his powers (which he obtained if I must add without no effort) but for some reason the author unnecessarily adds a paragraph where he explains "improvements" to the dragon's design, I understand the point of view when writing because you as the author have an idea in your head of what happens, but it is redundant to describe it to the reader Because over-explaining kills the reader's ability to delve into the narrative. Lastly and much more personally, I understand the admiration for other cultures, but when reading a story of the type the author is trying to write it is difficult for immersion to suddenly encounter Japanese words and subsequently their translation even going to the point of adding hiragana or katakana, It seems like a poor decision to try to educate? Through a story if what you want is for the reader to immerse themselves in your world. Apart from this I wish the author great success.

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Vidhan_Bhardwaj

You gotta work on the charachter personality and interactions all in all the fanfic is good tho

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MIGHTY_ALPIO

It's good and new concept senju Hashirama god of shinobi world in jjk it's going to be way good and I hope you continue it I am supporting it

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Lucas_Otaku

(PT-BR) Por favor autor não desanime com os comentários ruins, eu estou gostando bastante da história e de pra onde ela está caminhando e estou gostando do ritmo também, tenha consciência de que nem mesmo Deus consegue agradar todo mundo e foque em fazer uma história que você ache boa, só não exagere e mude totalmente o curso da história como os chineses fazer hahahahaha.

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Impulsive_69Author

This seems to be a regular occurrence in Webnovel rating your own fanfic as 5-Stars so I might as well join in this particular occurrence. -When in Rome Do as the Romans Do

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Lucas_Otaku

(PT-BR) Eu estou gostando bastante de história, tá se desenvolvendo bem e não está saindo muito do universo de Jujutsu no sentido que tipo não está mudando muito como funciona o Jujutsu.

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Shiro_Kusanagi_69

I like the Concept, looking forward for more

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Duke_of_Insanity

boring. it was just straight boring. everything was just sped through and not really thought out. the was no emotion or feelings at all. everything just felt so dull and emotionless like he just didn't really care