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The untold story of love, hope and fate. How he will change the future?
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Pros: Rather poetic, graceful prose, like a fairytale story or a dark, grim tale. Use of rare words noted. Cons: Rather short, too quick pacing, lack of elaboration and connection. Suggestion: Put all of the four chapters into one, and rename the whole chapter into something different. I see potential, but it's hitting the wrong tones. Good luck!
The storyline is nice. And it is good that the plot was not dragged further and was on point. Sad that is was short. I like how you write and your sentence structure is good not like the other entries๐. Hope that you do more writings in the future.
Wow! excellent writing. I m not really a fan of MLBB, I only play this game when I m bored and Webnovel but someone recommend this to me on Facebook and I gave it a try. I did not regret reading this one. Two thumbs up wish you will reach more readers.
The ending will be better if Alucard tried to change the prophecy but his destiny will keep on chasing him. And the girl he loves will die in the end. Can I be the writer you need for the ending?
I just read your review last night and thanks about that, I have read your story and if I can recall back when I just started, both of us advertised our works at the same time. :D God bless for the both of us again , thanks for leaving a review on my story
i like it, but i rlly think its too short :/ idk if its good for the top 10 because of the length of the story, but the poetic nature to it makes up for the shortness i guess.
Poets are very rare nowadays but I m happy to see the combination of Poem and Novel on MLBB: LOVE UNTOLD! two thumbs up to you gurl! I hope you will make it to the top 10
For real a "POETIC TRAGEDY PHENOMENA" hope this story will be noticed by the readers. May good quality stories prevail. Congrats to the author, this is now one of my favorites!
It is good :). As what others said it is rather poetic well, that's a good point. This story needs to be recongnized for it has the potential. Good luck!!
HONESTLY, THE STORY IS EXCELLENT BUT AS WHAT OTHER SAID IN THEIR REVIEWS YOU NEED TO ADD MORE CONTENT ON YOUR STORY DON'T PUT YOUR READERS IN A "BITIN" STATE. AND AS A FAN OF ODETTE AND LANCELOT STORY I HATE YOU FOR MAKING ME GUILTY ABOUT THE FEELINGS OF ALUCARD, JUST KIDDING. IT IS FUNNY HOW YOU CAMPAIGN YOUR STORY I SAW THE COMMENT SECTION OF THIS EVENT YESTERDAY AND YOU REALLY PUT AN EFFORT IN SPREADING YOUR WORK TWO THUMBS UP FOR THE DETERMINATION AND PLEASE IF WRITING IS REALLY YOUR PASSION DON'T STOP WRITING GOOD STORIES. GOOD LUCK
I m also an author from other Online novel app and a fan of MLBB also. You have the potential in writing but you should make a more longer story for your readers so that they will not be dismay on what they read. Hope that you make it to the top
The story had given a bittersweet taste to a typical love story but too short and it needs improvement in terms of giving the readers more chapters to read on.
If you think that the top 1 is a savage well, raise your standards this one is a must read story. A bittersweet love story with a twist you really form a question on your mind about what will happen next. This is a mixed of all the emotions. The ending will be your conclusions. Kudos to the writer ๐๐
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The story was really short, especially in the first few chapters. I know you could have branched it out more but, nonetheless, I still enjoyed it. I just wished you could have done more because I want to know more of what happened in the story. Excellent writing though, well done!
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I really love the ending blackswan. you gave a poectic version the story of reincarnation which reminded me my favorite Kdrama- Goblin the ending is must read! Good luck
A bit short and lack of details. You should atleast put some more details in each event happening in the story. Try reading novels on how they execute what is happening. I love the twist. Your story have a potential only if you add some more to it. Anyway goodluck.
Itsa poetic tragedy! One of da best so far! Great job! I saw your plug on the comments and was not disappointed! Kudos! AhhskaBvwjqkqkvdjskan
Did you know that I admire you because you created a rare kind of story that was kissed by your style in writing poems? I am also writing poems and I know that combining different genre is very hard. Keep up the good work
I joined this contest not for prize and fame but to improve my self in the field of writing AND TO REACH MORE READERS MLBB: LOVE UNTOLD NEEDS YOUR REVIEW I WILL ACCEPT NEGATIVE REVIEWS IF IT IS FOR MY IMPROVEMENT. THANKS