Moonlight of my desert

Oh, the main character did not know the nature of man? Man is weak in spirit, therefore part of people are characterized by meanness, betrayal, it’s easier for them to live. Than to go through enlightenment. The first chapter, although small, not typically small, would even say. But as a seed for history is very fresh! Brevity is the soul of wit! Alas ... a stereotype, a cliché, re-circulation ... and again a person returns to the past ... you won’t go into the same river twice ... I hoped that the author would be able to write something fresh, his own, original, good, the author writes well, beautifully, clearly! This is a detective ... the form is beautiful, the content is also very curious. I am not a pro, not a writer, just the same author and reader, so my advice is subjective. Let's go... I would like to advise the author IMHO so that he himself could come up with an original plot and not a remake or a replicant, though a good replicant ... but still not the original! Go back and take revenge? Isn’t it easier to just become smarter, wiser, more cunning, and not take a steam bath about those who can betray, do good deeds and this will return good. And to be the second Earl of De Monte Cristo ...? But of course, the author has his own opinion, maybe he can create a second masterpiece like Rebirth: How A Loser Became A Prince Charming? We'll see! Oooh ... rings ... it reminded me of one Scandinavian story ... Selma Lagerlöf, though there was a ring ... An author can provoke a feeling of discontent with an anti-hero. The drama is present, as is the intrigue, there are clan features too. All that is necessary for the action of the novel.

A bit of serious criticism, please bear with me for the nitty-gritty stuff. First, the language-related criticism, The story seems interesting from the details you've put out, however the occasional typo or run-on sentences (and paragraphs) gets kind of distracting. I personally recommend using free programs out there, or even the help of a beta-reader, in order to make the story shine even more. Secondly, the "show, don't tell" aspect. I mean, it's not an ironclad rule, and if circumstances call, you can use both. However, some of the times you're telling the reader what happened feels jarring and reduce the feeling of the story. For example, I recall one part about how the aunt, a loving and kind person, is sick with stage 4 cancer. Instead of saying something along the lines of "The aunt has stage 4 cancer, she's very kind and loving." perhaps show her doing little things even if she's bedridden? For example, she can hold the MC's hand and smile. The little things will make the moment when she inevitably died even more poignant and sad. Those technical stuff aside, this is interesting. The MC seems to always have something up her sleeve. Keep writing!