Naruto: Shinobi SI

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JSirMixalotL

Overall a great approach. There are only 2 things i have to point out.1: Ther are many explanations that disrupt the flow of the story. Since this is a Fanfic there is no need to go into so much detail that most readers will skip anyway.2: It is quite slow paced. Again very detailed, but way too much in my opinion. Since this is pure training/learning until now it gets boring quite fast, at least for my expectation of a story in this world.Apart from those 2 points it is a great experience. Very good grammar, frequent updates and a very different MC compared to most FFs. Maybe you can do something about my critique, other than that keep up the good work

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KK9494

Point out any mistakes in the paragraph comments, I will try to correct them. Also give some reviews. ..............................................

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KK9494

Please review, comment and send stones. Try do so in a encouraging way, I can’t handle negative bashing. I am a new author ✍️.

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MrVenerable

I read chapter 1 to 19. Everything almost perfect but the MC is a bit immature and emotional unstable I hope there would be a great disaster will happen so the MC would become more mature and become a great Ninja, because for what I see the MC is just ranting, complaining and not doing anything that will help or relief him from his problem.

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Zenaxs

Thank you author, it was an interesting adventure, I hope you can please us again. What inspires me most in your work is the world design; it’s truly something well-developed and living its own life. Good luck.

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Vaporites

this is good naruto fanfiction i have read so far after outsider resolve

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Gd_Sys

Moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

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behind_your_sister

one of the best NARUTO fanfic

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Jordi_Hardiansyah

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1stDrunkenImmortal

👍.

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Azshar

It’s too early to say anything, but I really liked the beginning. I will continue to follow the development of the plot. If the pace and style of the narrative does not change, it will be one of the best works on Naruto.