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personally this story seems one deminsional the mc just suck in general and feels forced and has a stupid personality. there is a lot wrong imo with this
U made nami and robin a joke booooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo000000000000000000000000000000iooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
Writing - Its readable 5 ⭐ story - its bad but its enjoyable (for me) i even finished it 4 ⭐ character - the only character i find wierd is whitebeard the author made him bad but overall its all good 4 ⭐ updating - to support the book 5 ⭐ world - lack many details but i like this book so 4 ⭐ my real review if i don't like this fanfic: writing - 5 ⭐ story - 3 ⭐ character - 3 ⭐ updating - 5 ⭐ World - 2 ⭐ Thanks author for this Fanfic 🗿
story is very cliché no 1.training arc, 2.character building , 3. mc gets op too quickly he is already admiral level at chap 2 wth
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this novel is good, and the protagonist of this novel is good too, but the story is slow going forward,.. even the MC is naive,. I know there are many enemies but instead tell the public that he has a wife. his wife's turn was kidnapped due to the carelessness or arrogance of the MC himself, he instead blamed the protagonist of the anime One piece, hufft I feel sorry for luffy, even though he is an idiot, but he is willing to protect his crew and treats them like family, and I suspect that the author actually hates Luffy
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This is now my favorite book and the quality was great along with the character development and story development I like how they changed Luffy so it wasn't like the original novel overall everything is great
good novel. writing quality is passable. i hope you can keep this up. i get excited with these kinds of fanfics related to mainstream stories. i enjoyed how you made your own version of a twist of one piece. hope you update sooner :)
It is a nice idea, but the grammar is so bad, the story is too fast. It has a lot of potential but it git all wasted, main factor is the grammar, so many mistakes, like in every sentece
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Here are 5 stars as a thanks for the story. Atm i have nothing to read and this popped up. I dont care about the grammar i red a lot worse books then this. Good luck in writing Author.
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La historia fue muy buena, no se si se continuará pero fue buena aunque en los inicios el MC pidió deseos tontos pero en el resto de la historia el MC no decepciona aunque personalmente yo quería conquistara a shirahoshi o bueno la princesa sirena, y que MC no fuera tan aplacado por sus mujeres pero bueno, en cuanto a sugerencias de como terminarlo supongo que entre eso sería que luffy y Seth vaya al one piece y te inventes el secreto que quieres y derroten al gobierno y Seth sería gobernante y lufffy sería rey pirata mm o algo nose, igual la novela estuvo buena
new one-piece fic pls.,..........................................................................................................................................................
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If you want a few tips on how to continue the story just read on. Otherwise this was an amazing fanfic and I would honestly love to see if you could keep this up. Here’s the ideas: How about you try writing up to the battle after Im and being recognised as the ruler of the world. Also you could have his son being kidnapped to kickstart the battle. After that how about a short arc with him exploring all of the seas, finding all the mythical place like the all blue (honestly for this I’m assuming it’s directly below the reverse mountain cuz that’s the most logical way), Elbaf, and the other places. You could also add him fusing the world devil fruit with a clone and get him to reunite the super continent Pangea to be the true ruler. And you can add more kids during this. Plus add in a bit more to the family part of the commanders who are single, and whitebeard. You could add in the annihilation or the celestial dragons. After this you could either finish it or continue on. If you are continuing, then you could have him marking the one piece world with the Mark devil fruit or maybe a space devil fruit, and have him travel to other anime worlds. You could have him meeting god again and being given the choice to either restart the story or continue onwards to another world. Also give him the ability to take his family and friends with him, or you can do the simple thing and just bind the world to his soul, allowing him to be the true ruler of the world and then he would be able to take care of his family. Or you could give him something like a personal world where only the people he allows can enter. And you could set a reasonable time dilation cuz you don’t want him to miss out on his family time too much while he’s in a different world. There should also be a limitation on the world where for the moment only Seth can enter, and the rest have to stay behind. Plus you could add a few more girls if you want by feeding him an energy or stamina related devil fruit. It’s not like the readers know all the devil fruits so it should be fine. (There’s already a lust devil fruit that Lilith had so it’s possible.) There are a lot of words to start off with some being insanely strong. You should decide if you want the story to end quickly or to keep it going. If you want to end it quickly then just send him to an op world and get him to get stronger and reach The top in one go. If you want to drag it out a bit, then get him to travel through different worlds and spend a few years in each to get the highest powers, plus a girl or two. Plus get the god to him and his girls a few hundred years per world conquered or just outright make him immortal and let him enjoy the travel between worlds. Put like a pier restriction for his friends and family to enter the new world. Like have to have IM’s strength level or Hagoromo’s strength to enter the Naruto world. If by this time or any other time you get bored writing, either just drop it or write the best scenes of each world. If at any time you want to finish up, just say that Seth got strong enough to hide his world from every other influence, and lived happily ever after. Maybe a short story about his wives and kids later on. I have more ideas but honestly I have no clue whether you’ll write up to this point or not, so we’ll see how it goes. If you need help just ask :)
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Are you still alive??if so plss continue this . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . .. ...
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This novel is like you accidentally step on dog dung. You know what I mean. I am quite surprised this is high rated. The story does not follow the typical norm on one piece, the MC is a big egocentric guy, justifying himself and contradicting himself at the same time, a big paradox. The world development well it is one piece no originality in there. The writing quality is below adequate I need to re-read a paragraph only to envision the scenes the author want to convey. Update is fine. Character development seems ****ty, the mc is like a standard chinese web novel Protag that goes like everybody is wrong I am the only one who is right. Overall I have this 1 star bec. Of my own disappointing views on this story.
personally this story seems one deminsional the mc just suck in general and feels forced and has a stupid personality. there is a lot wrong imo with this
U made nami and robin a joke booooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo000000000000000000000000000000iooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
Writing - Its readable 5 ⭐ story - its bad but its enjoyable (for me) i even finished it 4 ⭐ character - the only character i find wierd is whitebeard the author made him bad but overall its all good 4 ⭐ updating - to support the book 5 ⭐ world - lack many details but i like this book so 4 ⭐ my real review if i don't like this fanfic: writing - 5 ⭐ story - 3 ⭐ character - 3 ⭐ updating - 5 ⭐ World - 2 ⭐ Thanks author for this Fanfic 🗿
story is very cliché no 1.training arc, 2.character building , 3. mc gets op too quickly he is already admiral level at chap 2 wth
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is this a MTL novel.........................................................................................mmmmmmm............................?
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this novel is good, and the protagonist of this novel is good too, but the story is slow going forward,.. even the MC is naive,. I know there are many enemies but instead tell the public that he has a wife. his wife's turn was kidnapped due to the carelessness or arrogance of the MC himself, he instead blamed the protagonist of the anime One piece, hufft I feel sorry for luffy, even though he is an idiot, but he is willing to protect his crew and treats them like family, and I suspect that the author actually hates Luffy
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This is now my favorite book and the quality was great along with the character development and story development I like how they changed Luffy so it wasn't like the original novel overall everything is great
good novel. writing quality is passable. i hope you can keep this up. i get excited with these kinds of fanfics related to mainstream stories. i enjoyed how you made your own version of a twist of one piece. hope you update sooner :)
It is a nice idea, but the grammar is so bad, the story is too fast. It has a lot of potential but it git all wasted, main factor is the grammar, so many mistakes, like in every sentece
11 months with no update Are these dropped?~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~}
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Here are 5 stars as a thanks for the story. Atm i have nothing to read and this popped up. I dont care about the grammar i red a lot worse books then this. Good luck in writing Author.
Update please ...............................................................................................................
Reveal Spoiler La historia fue muy buena, no se si se continuará pero fue buena aunque en los inicios el MC pidió deseos tontos pero en el resto de la historia el MC no decepciona aunque personalmente yo quería conquistara a shirahoshi o bueno la princesa sirena, y que MC no fuera tan aplacado por sus mujeres pero bueno, en cuanto a sugerencias de como terminarlo supongo que entre eso sería que luffy y Seth vaya al one piece y te inventes el secreto que quieres y derroten al gobierno y Seth sería gobernante y lufffy sería rey pirata mm o algo nose, igual la novela estuvo buena
new one-piece fic pls.,..........................................................................................................................................................
Reveal Spoiler If you want a few tips on how to continue the story just read on. Otherwise this was an amazing fanfic and I would honestly love to see if you could keep this up. Here’s the ideas: How about you try writing up to the battle after Im and being recognised as the ruler of the world. Also you could have his son being kidnapped to kickstart the battle. After that how about a short arc with him exploring all of the seas, finding all the mythical place like the all blue (honestly for this I’m assuming it’s directly below the reverse mountain cuz that’s the most logical way), Elbaf, and the other places. You could also add him fusing the world devil fruit with a clone and get him to reunite the super continent Pangea to be the true ruler. And you can add more kids during this. Plus add in a bit more to the family part of the commanders who are single, and whitebeard. You could add in the annihilation or the celestial dragons. After this you could either finish it or continue on. If you are continuing, then you could have him marking the one piece world with the Mark devil fruit or maybe a space devil fruit, and have him travel to other anime worlds. You could have him meeting god again and being given the choice to either restart the story or continue onwards to another world. Also give him the ability to take his family and friends with him, or you can do the simple thing and just bind the world to his soul, allowing him to be the true ruler of the world and then he would be able to take care of his family. Or you could give him something like a personal world where only the people he allows can enter. And you could set a reasonable time dilation cuz you don’t want him to miss out on his family time too much while he’s in a different world. There should also be a limitation on the world where for the moment only Seth can enter, and the rest have to stay behind. Plus you could add a few more girls if you want by feeding him an energy or stamina related devil fruit. It’s not like the readers know all the devil fruits so it should be fine. (There’s already a lust devil fruit that Lilith had so it’s possible.) There are a lot of words to start off with some being insanely strong. You should decide if you want the story to end quickly or to keep it going. If you want to end it quickly then just send him to an op world and get him to get stronger and reach The top in one go. If you want to drag it out a bit, then get him to travel through different worlds and spend a few years in each to get the highest powers, plus a girl or two. Plus get the god to him and his girls a few hundred years per world conquered or just outright make him immortal and let him enjoy the travel between worlds. Put like a pier restriction for his friends and family to enter the new world. Like have to have IM’s strength level or Hagoromo’s strength to enter the Naruto world. If by this time or any other time you get bored writing, either just drop it or write the best scenes of each world. If at any time you want to finish up, just say that Seth got strong enough to hide his world from every other influence, and lived happily ever after. Maybe a short story about his wives and kids later on. I have more ideas but honestly I have no clue whether you’ll write up to this point or not, so we’ll see how it goes. If you need help just ask :)
Reveal Spoiler Are you still alive??if so plss continue this . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . .. ...
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This novel is like you accidentally step on dog dung. You know what I mean. I am quite surprised this is high rated. The story does not follow the typical norm on one piece, the MC is a big egocentric guy, justifying himself and contradicting himself at the same time, a big paradox. The world development well it is one piece no originality in there. The writing quality is below adequate I need to re-read a paragraph only to envision the scenes the author want to convey. Update is fine. Character development seems ****ty, the mc is like a standard chinese web novel Protag that goes like everybody is wrong I am the only one who is right. Overall I have this 1 star bec. Of my own disappointing views on this story.