Otherworlder's Adventure In The Dungeon

LV 5

Just_A_Bored_Otaku

Writing Quality - 5* Stability of Updates - 5* Character Design - 2* Story Development - 2* World Backround - 4* Wanted to give a way higher rating but too many things that I can't really understand : 1) Hephaestus is the goddess of blacksmith, so I doubt that the Mc would be able use a trick she doesn't know. I mean Millions of years of blacksmithing should be way more advanced compared to whatever time we spend on it. - Here the Mc how "has Amnesia" knows tricks she doesn't. 2) Hephaestus requesting Ryu to teach him instead of Tsubaki or even Mia ? doesn't make much sense to me. Ryu interested in 50% off voucher ? Plot ok then doable but she uses a wooden sword to begin with can't see her that interested to begin with (She's retired). 3) Training in public and Ryu ? Mia won't do that, makes no sense for her to put Ryu in harm's way for money(She's blacklisted and has too many enemies). Mia is still a lv6 adventure not to mention former Captain of Freya Famila she can way more money than resorting to stunts like this. 4) Ryu isn't a slave, she can do whatever she wants, whenever she wants when she isn't on her shift. Mkrs mo sense once again. 5) Makes no sense for so many familias to come and watch a sparring match. 6) Too much drama in training skill aside just from the difference in stats is enough for Ryu to destroy him. 7) A lv4, lost to a lv1? Even lv aside Ryu is far more skilled, u can't expect a newbie who has just started to be trained for a few days to be times more skilled than one of the most skilled character in the series. 8) All of a sudden nobody knows the Loki familia? 9) Daheck are you doing with Finn and saying he found a rival ? Thats a lv1 a newbie someone who trained for less than a year. Now your putting that up ? 10) Too much Cringe with Finn going on with Rival part, it just go higher when he says first rival ? In his decades of experience he never even considered anyone his rival and now a newbie ? - The contradiction is strong here. 11) You put in hard work one too many times, there are many hardworking people in the story here. 12) This came after reading just the first 8 chapters. These are plot holes here mate, only 1-3 days worth of editing and you can fix them up completely 'if you want" took quite a while to write it and only did cause the story has potential.

LV 4

The_Young_Flash

I love this story and how it all came together in the epilogue. So awesome thou. I get why you didn't do first person perspective all this while. I can't wait to see how he and Ais know each other thou.

LV 2

primordial

nice i'm liking a lot so far keep up the good work please and thank you!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

LV 6

CarlosSalazar

So far an intresting story, but really in ten chapters you can read an insignificant growth in the MC personality... probably because there is no MC POV... Is good to see the world reaction to the main character, but if the hole prologue (10 capters) hold none of his view we don't know him at all, we don't how he felt when he reincarnated, how he felt when he got a familia, how he felt when he trained and make friends.

LV 12

ForgetfulAtheist

I think this is a really good fanfic, the way the first volume is written is new and interesting, the best part is that it gives me nice no-harem vibes and I hate harem, so definitely a plus.

LV 13

Ethanma

I really like the way you write. I look forward the nexts chapters. 👍❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤ ❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤👌

LV 4

Yami_Sh

I'd say everything is good for me personally except the updates. Still don't know if this is dropped or not. Author-san, you can always rewrite this. Personally, I like this.