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Great story and an amazing character as you made them at least seem like a character and not like a hollow shell with powers ..................
cannot wait for more chapters to be brought to life, it's an amazing work of art!! I love the character and how the story is played through his eye's! and I absolutely love the character development!!!
This is Canon Harry Potter story with an extra character (MC) forcing himself in the plot. Mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
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the story is along and then you encounter a wild sentence structure and out of nowhere a grammar mistake appears but who am i to talk no commas periods or capitalization go superman attack with your superior kryptonian intellect
Cuz i want him to write more chapters please and random thing Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I love this fanfic and uhhhhh I love the ocean Annnnnnnnnd uhhhhh Love it
I like the idea very much, that the mc is a dementor, unique. Of course you could have written it different but I like it. Want to read more please😁
Le synopsis devrait dire: Le Mc est un detraqueur jusqu'au chapitre 8 puis devient un gros étron comme toute les fanfiction sur HP. Le héro avait tous pour être un méchant MAIS NON il va devenir gentil car.... cest pas gentil d'être méchant.
All the complaints about him turning into a toddler, pretty much because he has emotion. Complaint about somehow escaping the prison, that you know he was supposed to guard... Then another complaint about Sirius's soul influencing the MC so much that he is now going to protect the black family in his name because the MC feels bad for devouring him.. I think it's perfectly reasonable, to feel indebted to a man you accidentally killed... Not the mention they become his genuine family shortly after by you know, being the first people to have ever cared for him... There is no problem with most of the development, anyone complaining about it just has a personal preference. Now for the ACTUAL review. Writing Quality: Some mistakes here and there, clearly improving as he goes. Stability of Updates: Very good, unfortunately some things happened recently so it's on temporary hiatus for now. Story Development: Most of the story is the same as the standard Harry Potter story, do note that we are following the MC in this world, it's not about the main story. And that story is also due to change in time. Character Design: Love the character, a lot of potential. Some minor, not sure what you're doing. But overal just fine. World Background: I mean it's harry potter, what more do you want? ;) Now if you're going to complain about the high score, note that I believe the story is undervalued.
So now I'm going to assume that this story has been dropped. It was great while it lasted. I wish it could have gone on longer. R.I.P. 😭
🌹💎 Please Please Please don't drop. We are waiting on updates. We need more. ❄️ Don't leave us out in the cold waiting for an update. 💖
Эта моя любимая фан история хоть и не все понимаю. !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The story had potential, but it was all ****ed up. I apologize for the harsh words, but it is. Firstly, MCs had a difficult childhood before reincarnation and instead of maturing earlier than other children, this does not happen. Further, after his reincarnation, he devours the souls of Lestrange and Sirius and instead of FUCKING MATURE AND NOT BEING LIKE A CHILD, HE FUCKING EVERYTHING IS LIKE THIS. What is the problem? You ask, so the problem is that he ate the soul of one of the most brutal KILLERS and the ADULT, MATURE ROOM OF BLACK'S HOUSE. Everything would be fine, but he got THEIR MEMORY, it's not okay if he acts like a child. Secondly, I'm wondering why the hell he doesn't act like the heir of the House of Blacks and why Andromeda didn't teach him etiquette. Third, why the hell ... he ended up in Gryffindor ... The author said it's because he regrets that he ate the soul of Sirius and wants to protect Harry and his family, which would seem true if houses like Slytherin and Hufflepuff didn't exist. It's just ... um ... Gryffindor is for reckless idiots, and he's not. AHA IF, when he was falsely accused of murder, he did what ... right ... NOTHING ... The author, what prevented him from asking to be given a SERUM OF TRUTH.
very good, this is my favorite type of MC, someone who really loves his family and does everything for her, I don’t like a cruel MC who kills everyone just to show himself strong or an MC who always wants to be a moral hero , an MC who does cruelty for his family but remains with the same lucida, very good
try originality than copied translation... write ur own story .. the novel had potential but turn into a Harry Potter worshipping fap.. atleast change some details about the story
goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood
Great fic potential but was ruin bY going with griffindor. following cannon harry and lame ron. lots of filler rUbbish. Dunno about the whole back story that dont hold for MC and the memory lost. it just dont flow well.
La historia esta muy buena, el concepto es nuevo y hay buen desarrollo, aunque me gustaría un poco más de seriedad a ciertas cosas en MC se sonrojar mucho o esquiva miradas aunque no se sabe si su cuerpo es solo un cuerpo o también imita su pensamiento de niño dado que aunque el MC era joven y socialmente pobre en su primera vida pero aún debería tener la edad para solo sonrojarse ante verdaderas cosas de vergüenza, bueno eso es solo mi opinión el resto estabien, también sería bueno que pudiera usar magia como dementor como un auténtico reaper y quizás también aprenda a luchar cuerpo a cuerpo? Siempre se sabe que el más fuerte es el mago+guerrero
I just love How Soren could make Demontors his lap dogs and make them do what ever he wants. It was a badass. wasteful and awesome at the same time.
Okay, before anything I need to mention that I am not a Harry Potter Fan. I mean, I like it alright but... it's just not my thing. Surprise - I thoroughly enjoy reading this story. Such a unique character for the MC! Just a tinge of Darkness in the story (in my opinion) and well, just read it yourself! [Remember, me no potter fan so this is huge surprise to find me likey this story.]
Nice. Finally seeing him dark is good. Nice. Finally seeing him dark is good.Nice. Finally seeing him dark is good.Nice. Finally seeing him dark is good.
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The story is well-made, the MC and story idea were made with perfection. Has a very interesting story and the events are also great. Makes you wish for the next chapter to be out
The Mc is great, the story is great. There are some random grammatical mistakes but nothing major. I can't wait to see where the story goes!
Very nice. Very well writen. I personally would like to seen the vila queen and soran get Together.............................................
🌹💎 !! I really like this novel. Please don't take too long rewriting this. I can't wait.
Great story and an amazing character as you made them at least seem like a character and not like a hollow shell with powers ..................
cannot wait for more chapters to be brought to life, it's an amazing work of art!! I love the character and how the story is played through his eye's! and I absolutely love the character development!!!
This is Canon Harry Potter story with an extra character (MC) forcing himself in the plot. Mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
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the story is along and then you encounter a wild sentence structure and out of nowhere a grammar mistake appears but who am i to talk no commas periods or capitalization go superman attack with your superior kryptonian intellect
Cuz i want him to write more chapters please and random thing Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I love this fanfic and uhhhhh I love the ocean Annnnnnnnnd uhhhhh Love it
I like the idea very much, that the mc is a dementor, unique. Of course you could have written it different but I like it. Want to read more please😁
Le synopsis devrait dire: Le Mc est un detraqueur jusqu'au chapitre 8 puis devient un gros étron comme toute les fanfiction sur HP. Le héro avait tous pour être un méchant MAIS NON il va devenir gentil car.... cest pas gentil d'être méchant.
All the complaints about him turning into a toddler, pretty much because he has emotion. Complaint about somehow escaping the prison, that you know he was supposed to guard... Then another complaint about Sirius's soul influencing the MC so much that he is now going to protect the black family in his name because the MC feels bad for devouring him.. I think it's perfectly reasonable, to feel indebted to a man you accidentally killed... Not the mention they become his genuine family shortly after by you know, being the first people to have ever cared for him... There is no problem with most of the development, anyone complaining about it just has a personal preference. Now for the ACTUAL review. Writing Quality: Some mistakes here and there, clearly improving as he goes. Stability of Updates: Very good, unfortunately some things happened recently so it's on temporary hiatus for now. Story Development: Most of the story is the same as the standard Harry Potter story, do note that we are following the MC in this world, it's not about the main story. And that story is also due to change in time. Character Design: Love the character, a lot of potential. Some minor, not sure what you're doing. But overal just fine. World Background: I mean it's harry potter, what more do you want? ;) Now if you're going to complain about the high score, note that I believe the story is undervalued.
So now I'm going to assume that this story has been dropped. It was great while it lasted. I wish it could have gone on longer. R.I.P. 😭
🌹💎 Please Please Please don't drop. We are waiting on updates. We need more. ❄️ Don't leave us out in the cold waiting for an update. 💖
Эта моя любимая фан история хоть и не все понимаю. !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The story had potential, but it was all ****ed up. I apologize for the harsh words, but it is. Firstly, MCs had a difficult childhood before reincarnation and instead of maturing earlier than other children, this does not happen. Further, after his reincarnation, he devours the souls of Lestrange and Sirius and instead of FUCKING MATURE AND NOT BEING LIKE A CHILD, HE FUCKING EVERYTHING IS LIKE THIS. What is the problem? You ask, so the problem is that he ate the soul of one of the most brutal KILLERS and the ADULT, MATURE ROOM OF BLACK'S HOUSE. Everything would be fine, but he got THEIR MEMORY, it's not okay if he acts like a child. Secondly, I'm wondering why the hell he doesn't act like the heir of the House of Blacks and why Andromeda didn't teach him etiquette. Third, why the hell ... he ended up in Gryffindor ... The author said it's because he regrets that he ate the soul of Sirius and wants to protect Harry and his family, which would seem true if houses like Slytherin and Hufflepuff didn't exist. It's just ... um ... Gryffindor is for reckless idiots, and he's not. AHA IF, when he was falsely accused of murder, he did what ... right ... NOTHING ... The author, what prevented him from asking to be given a SERUM OF TRUTH.
very good, this is my favorite type of MC, someone who really loves his family and does everything for her, I don’t like a cruel MC who kills everyone just to show himself strong or an MC who always wants to be a moral hero , an MC who does cruelty for his family but remains with the same lucida, very good
try originality than copied translation... write ur own story .. the novel had potential but turn into a Harry Potter worshipping fap.. atleast change some details about the story
goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood
Great fic potential but was ruin bY going with griffindor. following cannon harry and lame ron. lots of filler rUbbish. Dunno about the whole back story that dont hold for MC and the memory lost. it just dont flow well.
La historia esta muy buena, el concepto es nuevo y hay buen desarrollo, aunque me gustaría un poco más de seriedad a ciertas cosas en MC se sonrojar mucho o esquiva miradas aunque no se sabe si su cuerpo es solo un cuerpo o también imita su pensamiento de niño dado que aunque el MC era joven y socialmente pobre en su primera vida pero aún debería tener la edad para solo sonrojarse ante verdaderas cosas de vergüenza, bueno eso es solo mi opinión el resto estabien, también sería bueno que pudiera usar magia como dementor como un auténtico reaper y quizás también aprenda a luchar cuerpo a cuerpo? Siempre se sabe que el más fuerte es el mago+guerrero
I just love How Soren could make Demontors his lap dogs and make them do what ever he wants. It was a badass. wasteful and awesome at the same time.
Okay, before anything I need to mention that I am not a Harry Potter Fan. I mean, I like it alright but... it's just not my thing. Surprise - I thoroughly enjoy reading this story. Such a unique character for the MC! Just a tinge of Darkness in the story (in my opinion) and well, just read it yourself! [Remember, me no potter fan so this is huge surprise to find me likey this story.]
Nice. Finally seeing him dark is good. Nice. Finally seeing him dark is good.Nice. Finally seeing him dark is good.Nice. Finally seeing him dark is good.
very goood ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
The story is well-made, the MC and story idea were made with perfection. Has a very interesting story and the events are also great. Makes you wish for the next chapter to be out
The Mc is great, the story is great. There are some random grammatical mistakes but nothing major. I can't wait to see where the story goes!
Very nice. Very well writen. I personally would like to seen the vila queen and soran get Together.............................................
🌹💎 !! I really like this novel. Please don't take too long rewriting this. I can't wait.