Rule breakers

LV 6

anon88

This is a review of the first two chapters. The main character is an abused 15 year old girl named Olivia. She tried to runaway from her parents with her other five siblings four years ago. Only she was caught by her mother. Four years later she is still returning to the siblings original meeting place in hopes of reuniting. The plot is confusing. The plot doesn’t make sense if it was set in the real world ( the cops would have been called in due to the fire if nothing else). If it is set in a fantasy world, there should be elements added to the setting. Additionally, the is a change from third person narrative to second person narrative at the end of the second chapter.