TBATE: Shadows of the Past

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YoungMonarch

it is really good and I hope you don't drop I am sorry if I can't give a better review. I hope it is ok. 🙏🏻

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Imxaned9

Keep up the great work and hope you continue on with this work!

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SeniorSereneLotus

Shamele- ahem, true author review (meaning that I wont be shameless and give myself 5/5.) Writing Quality - 4/5 The writing quality of my fanfic is generally good. The descriptions are vivid, and the dialogue flows smoothly. I effectively capture the emotions of the characters, allowing the readers to connect with them to an extent. There are of course instances where the pacing feels a bit rushed, but overall, the writing is engaging and well-executed. Updating Stability - 4/5 The fanfic has a consistent updating schedule, however, right now it is being re-written, thus the chapters will come in either baches of 2 per week, or 4 per week. It all depends on how I am feeling that week, as some weeks are exhausting. In other words, there might be fluctuations in the release of chapters per week, but unless I am sick, have allergies, or am busy during that week, I will mostly update either 2-4 chapters per week, each update being in Friday unless I skipped a week that I didn’t update. Story Development - 4/5 The story is highly intriguing and will (depending on the person reading) keep you engaged. The story mostly follows Cain, who is the brother of Arthur Leywin, but there will be chapters in which Arthur is mostly shown more. Cain is the Protagonist of this fanfic, while Arthur is merely the Deuteragonist. The pacing of this fanfic is mostly well balanced, with enough action and character development to drive the nerrative forward. Character Design - 4/5 The characters within my fanfic, particularly Arthur and Cain, are well designed and have depth. Their personalities and motivations are fleshed out, with Cain being the cold and calculating of the the two, while Arthur is mostly the one with the more masks than even Cain himself. The interactions between characters feel authentic depending on the reader, and the growth of the Leywin brothers throughout the story so far is great. The addition of supporting characters, such as Virion, the Twin Horns, Tessia, the Leywin Parents, and the Helstea’s, adds further depth to the overall character ensemble. World Background - 4/5 My fanfic showcases a well-developed world with its own set of rules and magic system. I also provide sufficient details of not just the world, but the characters and their appearances. And although this fanfic has only just started, I do have high hopes for it to become one of the best tbate fanfics out there. Overall, Shadows of the Past is well developed so far, with little to no grammar mistakes and well thought out conversations and the such. The story is only missing one key detail, which I will hopefully fix soon: more chapters. Do not worry, after I have uploaded all of the re-written chapters, I will update 2 chapters per week. I am a great fan of novels and manga, so I know the pain of waiting a long time for new chapters to come. Overall Fanfic Review- 4/5

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EvilBlueCrystal

The protagonist is reincarnated along with details about the his mundane activities as a baby that are not. Important to the plot. The protagonist spends all his time talking about theories, about his alleged intelligence and his perfection in his previous world, but In reality he lacks any form of intelligence or strategic thinking, and want he's says are nothing more than empty statements, entire chapter is on the protagonist's advanced past world, when its not interesting and has zero relevance to the current world or story. Then there are two lackluster protagonists that the story switches back and forth, one is low intelligence plain character, while the other is an incessant chatterbox. This story lacks any meaningful development, that consists of huge info dumps and a reused plot, occasionally switching to his family thoughts and talks, then to Arthur, then back to the protagonist, and then to the family again with drama and crying. The cultivation is dull without anything unique or interesting that is just the protagonist talking about the accumulatin of mana particles to form a "mana heart" instead of a core, and a failure to give a logical reason about him creating his own cultivation technique when magic didn't exist in his previous world. The learning is reduced to the protagonist monotonous reading of books, and the protagonist gets a system that gives him skills and lacking any logic. While there are mentions and explanations about the world, they fail to show anything. The characters themselves are as flat as cardboard and the family is even more annoying, clichéd bunch. The story has no development, and is either info dumbs or uninteresting character thoughts, without introducing anything new.

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Fisherman_Dream

Hello, I'm a person who likes to read, your idea is great, there's just a small problem, the events are strange, the love interests are meaningless, I'm sorry but the novel could be amazing, putting Cain and his twin brother in the novel would be cool, Cain as a new deity, could think of a new beginning for his family, start everything different , in another world, Cain creating a divergence in space and time causing the two brothers to be reincarnated in The Beginning After The End, as adopted children of Arthur's family.

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Ruminker

I have a lot of fun reading this story and can't wait for more chapters👍