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The Awakening

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Author: bee_333

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I stroke the white horse I am riding lovingly before getting off.
we are currently at the river, the one called flowing souls. Such an eerie name for a beautiful river.
I move towards the bank, where the hands of the water caress the soft bosom of the land.
I feel the water rush forward and stop just in front of me, kissing the tips of my shoes.
I close my eyes and think of nothing but happiness.
The first time I went hunting with him, my jayjay. The feel of his hands on my body, the fire in his eyes when they roam over my body, that lust, that desire.
The way he laughs, the way he adores me, that is happiness.
Just then, I catch a weak scent of blood in the air. It is appetizing, my stomach churns and makes loud noises, and my legs take off of their own will in search of food.
There's blood everywhere. I am covered in blood. A man lay in front of me pale as ash, his hands clutching his neck, eyes bulged out in terror.
But I feel no guilt, none at all.
My eyes widen In pleasure. JayJay wouldn't approve of it, but this is what we are.
His ideas are Noble, but you can't deny your nature and still be you.
Humans have never denied their nature. They give in to their pleasures and cravings all the time. Animals are slaughtered for their satisfaction, as food. How is that any different from what I have just done?
I lick my fingers, enjoying the scent of the drying blood on them, he was truly a delicacy.
This part of me is a part he will never see, never.


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After what felt like an eternity, I began to feel it, the cold, but it was just my heart that felt it. The other parts of me became numb, I didn't feel anything or hear anything or see anything, just the cold in my heart and the darkness, the black sea.
I didn't go inside it, I sat at the bank of the sea and listened to the silence of the water. I knew the thoughts of the black sea, I could feel its consciousness, its desires and fears, it feared me, so I sat and watched. Then a lady with white flowing hair approached me, she had on a white wedding dress, she was beautiful. She stood at the mouth of the sea, where the water kissed the land and she beckoned to me, but I didn't see her, I only saw the silence and the black sea.
"you have to accept me in" she says with a cocky voice.
"why"
"why? I am the power, I am the beauty, I am the awakened, you are nothing without me"
"you're wrong" I say, standing up and turning my back to her. I walk a little distance then stop,
"you're nothing but a restless voice who needs me to exist" and I was gone with the wind, back to where I belonged, back to the arms of my loving boyfriend and his best friend.

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    Kid_Phantom

    This is in fact an awesome book, the plot and the characters are amazing, I love the bond that Micheal and Bells have, the writing is good you manage to capture my interest the only problem were some grammatical errors but besides that it was great. The pacing of the book is just right and I'll definitely keep reading this book. Oh for the grammatical error you can download Grammarly or just the plug in it will help you identify the errors while you write and also grade your writing. Good luck to you my fellow author I'm digging this book.

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    LaughingSalt

    The story starts with a mystery, and that dark and mysterious element carries on. Nice plot. Interesting story. I'm having trouble with reading big blocks of texts though. Breaking those big chunks down would be nice =) Keep up the good work!

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    Kandpalbhaskar010

    Great writing, interesting plot, mysterious vibe. What more do you want? The more you read, the more intriguing you become. Not to say, most of the chapters ending are full of cliffhanger, which makes you want to read more. I recommend this book to everyone. Just try it, you won't regret reading it.

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    Anotoki
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    It has a good story development and the pace is decent I guess but not quite sure, anyway. You should definitely use Grammarly or similar apps to fix grammatical issues.

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    phoenixhyperion

    Hello author! First of all, I want to praise you for the superb characters' portrayal, detailed body language, and emotional descriptions. It was nicely crafted, I applaud you for that. But I may have a slight issue with regards to your story pacing, just a bit. I think it's too fast, leaving some gaps in the story here and there. It's not a bad thing, I assure you, it's just that I got lost between parts. Like, in the initial chapter she said she's alone and then someone came in? Then these two people appeared, I think you provide an explanation on what's their relationship but it hasn't sunk into me yet since it's not highlighted too well. Like some important parts that answered the question "why are they in that situation?" is not elaborated well. She was treated badly at first, and it sounds like she hates him, and then in the next chapter, she actually likes him? Yeah, you got me lost on that part. But other than that, you're story was superbly great. You describe your characters so well, I can picture them out vividly. And it's an awesome thing. You did a great job with this story author! It's mind-blowingly cool! Keep up the good work!

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    MOCHIIICHII

    Your writing skills is awesome how you narrate the background of your story and also the character's image it really creates a fascinating plot. When I was reading your story in the first chapter of your book you nailed it and I'm impress of how you made this plot. I would love to read your story again!😄

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    bleedingpapers

    Writing quality is excellent! I suggest you cut the paragraph into shorter one since it's easier to read. And the flashback, really shaped the character though I was surprised that it came out early, still a good timing. Overall I love the plot, the story! cheers to the author!

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    GrotesqueIce

    I like the premise of the story. It has a dark vibe and I like it. However, the grammatical error and capitalization of noun and proper tenses must be observed. You have a room for improvement. This novel overall is enjoyable to read.

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    Mel_Aniv

    What a heart-catching novel....it really caught my attention to read it more. Gotta say the author has splendidly elaborated the story. It was awesome and I can symphatize with the lead All in All, great work!

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    Novelcat_Wind

    hello,dear writer, I am the novel editor of NovelCat, wind. After reading your appealing novel here, I sincerely invite you to join us as an honorary NovelCat author, let's give your book more chances! once your book gets exclusive contracted with our platform, you can get lots of bonuses! and we also offer non-exclusive contract, which means half share of subscription fee and free AD! 【my email: kazechanku@gmail.com】 If you are interested, pls send me an email, so that I can send you our doc about what we can offer to author by email. I’m sincerely looking forward to hearing from you. Please forgive me if my message causes any trouble to you.

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    Chantielu

    I love the plotline of the story. It's really mysterious and intriguing from the first chapter. Gosh, I like it. And, the protagonists, well, I can't decide who's my favourite yet. But, maybe I will. Love the book. Can't wait for more.

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    Septic_Red

    I am not going to review negatively your work because this story has a great plot, presents a quite nice concept. The main thing that concerns me is the fact that the story presents some big grammatical errors, which can be corrected easily by using Grammarly ( I have observed that English is not your main language by the thing you have done to the letter i). Also. The plot is quite lovely and the fact that you use multiple main characters thing is good.

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    Faysal_Ahmed_5058

    Great first chapter. Can't say more about the characters though. The plot is promising and really intriguing. Hope the mystery doesn't end too quickly

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    The_Canary

    hi dropping my review here :) I must say that you have interesting premise in this story. The characters seemed to have complex background. Keep up the good work!

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    Cyclxne

    I'm not usually the type to read romance novels, but here I am, writing a review for one. This book was able to draw me in with it's interesting title. No complaints about writing quality, except for slight punctuation errors here and there in dialogue. That is just formatting though, so there's no need to worry about that. Story development is great, I was able to immerse myself in the world of this novel and really follow along with the plot nicely with its perfect pace. Character design is detailed and unique for each of the characters in this novel - something I can appreciate. The world background could use some work, but this novel isn't too focused on that, so this is something extremely minor. Overall, this was a great read so far, and I'm looking forward to more chapters. Keep it up, author-san!

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    JustLikeWriting777

    The plot is super interesting and I gotta admit i am intrigued. I like the characters and i am very curios about them not gonna lie. The story has a steady pace, easy enough for one to understand how good the story is! So overall, I love it!

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    Glenstonx

    HI author, when I read your work, I was curious about the plotline, how will it be different than the cinderella story and I hope you would make great use of twisting some plot points for your benefits and overall, it was nice. Just looking forward to your next updates! Regards, Glenstonx

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    Nightsummer20

    The plot is filled with mysteries and I'm liking the bond that Mike and Bells share, it's cute and adorable. The plot definitely has potential and I wish the author will keep updating it. Good work author!

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    Gaureeey

    HI! the plot is beautiful and could be developed further, love the dedication the authot bee has to the novel, use grammarly or prowriting and review your chapters to help correct things, I cant wait to see Mira's journey !

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    pelzy
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    I love how the book pops off from the beginning and I love the character development. basically fell in love with the book. goodluck to the author.

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