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I'm glad you're writing in second person. That's rare and lots of fun to read. In fact, I'd kinda like to rewrite mine in second person, but I have a few scenes where the female protagonist is not present, so I'm sticking with third. Exposition is overrated. Too much of it puts readers to sleep, so jumping straight into the action is a good move. As it stands, you present a very exciting story.
It was a ride after reading your novel. This is a unique novel to me, and I love how you make me feel that I'm also in this world! :) Keep it up! :)
Hi, Author here with a shameless review — just to push it to 10. The novel is written in 2nd person — meaning "you" are the MC. It might seem jarring or enjoyable — but it's not a gimmick. I've mapped my chapters up to 300 — but the story has a life of its own. I'll consider any suggestions readers have on where they want to take the story — as long as it isn't too fantastic or deviate from the overall plot. Thanks for reading!
Good story. Gives me the Tolkien vibes. I like it! :) The writing quality is great. Story development is great, character design too, and the world background is detailed. The second perspective is unique too. Never read a story like that before. I give a 4.4! Keep up the good work, man! :D
Great story! Starts a bit slow but gets faster once he (you?) joins a party. Someone said D&D, I think its more warhammer RPG (the fantasy one) but with a 40K primarch. For one, he uses a Thunderhammer and he hates spellcasters! Torm the smith has a friggin Stormshield! Before chapter 30, he's already planning to implant organs and the troops will probably have the same genetic defect as the Space Wolves. The story has its light moments, grim moments, and graphically cruel moments. The MC which is you, tends to be a little cold and kinda sadistic? I'm not sure but I like it. It's a mature read and could use some polishing at times but definitely up there when it comes to grammar and spelling.
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well this one is a straightforward fantasy that reminds me of a d&d table. i like it. characters slowly develop and the story seems interesting. 2 chapters a day seems good but don't burn yourself out author! the writing style can be jarring at first but i got used to it. the author takes the time to review his work or he has an editor because spellings and grammar are close to flawless. the character (pc?) names are too varied (lotr, medieval, biblical, modern). you have trent, eomer, dune, caleb, thomas, and a bruce in one party? did you just take pc names and use them in your novel? but i like the inn's name! alice and the hungry cat! i'm enjoying your novel. i hope you keep writing!
Honest Review Not sure if I love this one or hate it honestly. Mixed feelings? The Good: The setting feels both realistic and fantastical at the same time which is honestly hard to pull off. Using the 2nd person does create good immersion. The grammar has been excellent! The Bad: I think I've read the word "You" more times in the 18 chapters of this book than every other book combined. 2nd person creates good immersion, but it doesn't create an identity for us without the author filling in some information. The Neutral: I personally would rather have it stuck to 3rd person, or possibly 1st, but I also understand part of the draw is the 2nd person POV and letting the readers imagine the MC as themselves.
this is my first time reading Novel like this. I don't know how to comment novel like this. But what I know, is that. your grammar is good. Honestly, I more like novel with third point of view.
Although this novel is not really my cup of tea (roleplay novels are not really my thing), I love how it just sucks the readers in. Anyone can picture themselves, play out the scenes and feel that they're living the character. It's unique and adventure lovers will enjoy it. Keep it up :)
I don't write reviews that much but this my early review on this. I'll change this in the future if it calls for the need. Anyways, the Grammar is really good compared to the other stories here on Webnovel. Hell, I'm even surprised by it's quality. World Background is pretty interesting in my opinion and about the Story Development there isn't much I can say as there isn't a lot of chapters. But overall, this novel is pretty good. It's something that could develop to a pretty successful story.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact avarohm_review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
I'm glad you're writing in second person. That's rare and lots of fun to read. In fact, I'd kinda like to rewrite mine in second person, but I have a few scenes where the female protagonist is not present, so I'm sticking with third. Exposition is overrated. Too much of it puts readers to sleep, so jumping straight into the action is a good move. As it stands, you present a very exciting story.
It was a ride after reading your novel. This is a unique novel to me, and I love how you make me feel that I'm also in this world! :) Keep it up! :)
Hi, Author here with a shameless review — just to push it to 10. The novel is written in 2nd person — meaning "you" are the MC. It might seem jarring or enjoyable — but it's not a gimmick. I've mapped my chapters up to 300 — but the story has a life of its own. I'll consider any suggestions readers have on where they want to take the story — as long as it isn't too fantastic or deviate from the overall plot. Thanks for reading!
Good story. Gives me the Tolkien vibes. I like it! :) The writing quality is great. Story development is great, character design too, and the world background is detailed. The second perspective is unique too. Never read a story like that before. I give a 4.4! Keep up the good work, man! :D
Great story! Starts a bit slow but gets faster once he (you?) joins a party. Someone said D&D, I think its more warhammer RPG (the fantasy one) but with a 40K primarch. For one, he uses a Thunderhammer and he hates spellcasters! Torm the smith has a friggin Stormshield! Before chapter 30, he's already planning to implant organs and the troops will probably have the same genetic defect as the Space Wolves. The story has its light moments, grim moments, and graphically cruel moments. The MC which is you, tends to be a little cold and kinda sadistic? I'm not sure but I like it. It's a mature read and could use some polishing at times but definitely up there when it comes to grammar and spelling.
Reveal Spoiler well this one is a straightforward fantasy that reminds me of a d&d table. i like it. characters slowly develop and the story seems interesting. 2 chapters a day seems good but don't burn yourself out author! the writing style can be jarring at first but i got used to it. the author takes the time to review his work or he has an editor because spellings and grammar are close to flawless. the character (pc?) names are too varied (lotr, medieval, biblical, modern). you have trent, eomer, dune, caleb, thomas, and a bruce in one party? did you just take pc names and use them in your novel? but i like the inn's name! alice and the hungry cat! i'm enjoying your novel. i hope you keep writing!
Honest Review Not sure if I love this one or hate it honestly. Mixed feelings? The Good: The setting feels both realistic and fantastical at the same time which is honestly hard to pull off. Using the 2nd person does create good immersion. The grammar has been excellent! The Bad: I think I've read the word "You" more times in the 18 chapters of this book than every other book combined. 2nd person creates good immersion, but it doesn't create an identity for us without the author filling in some information. The Neutral: I personally would rather have it stuck to 3rd person, or possibly 1st, but I also understand part of the draw is the 2nd person POV and letting the readers imagine the MC as themselves.
this is my first time reading Novel like this. I don't know how to comment novel like this. But what I know, is that. your grammar is good. Honestly, I more like novel with third point of view.
Although this novel is not really my cup of tea (roleplay novels are not really my thing), I love how it just sucks the readers in. Anyone can picture themselves, play out the scenes and feel that they're living the character. It's unique and adventure lovers will enjoy it. Keep it up :)
I don't write reviews that much but this my early review on this. I'll change this in the future if it calls for the need. Anyways, the Grammar is really good compared to the other stories here on Webnovel. Hell, I'm even surprised by it's quality. World Background is pretty interesting in my opinion and about the Story Development there isn't much I can say as there isn't a lot of chapters. But overall, this novel is pretty good. It's something that could develop to a pretty successful story.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact avarohm_review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.