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Imma tell you straight. This story ain't bad, but it ain't good either. It's too cliche. Too generalized. Cringe. And with system too. Not for me.
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Don't drop it take it slow and make a chatper when you can. This story is hard to write because its star war so we do not expect it to get loads of chatpers in a short while of time. and if your thinking of making a new novel that is like star wars but not hard to write try Stargate atlantis?
Need more and I hope that this story is not dropped or die from lack of support. Keep the physics of the reality of the star wars universe. ..............................................................................................
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Instead of the bucket why not make a new force skill that gets the water from the air and bath the water in the force and that is how the mc get water Instead of a magical bucket? love this book so far but do not destory the physics of the world.
Their are only two problems with this story that is the need for more character development and the second problem is the pace needs to be longer but still it is a great story. [img=update]
Судя по этой истории, мне не терпится увидеть больше (MC) и то, на что он способен в тот момент, мне нравится стиль письма, и я рад видеть, что нас ждет в следующих главах. Мне очень нравится этот роман. Будет больше глав
The base of the story is great, and it has amazing potential. I think you gave him to much power right off the bat. you need to grow the character more before a sudden power boost. It would be great to see the character have moral/emotional issues.
Truly one of the best out there. Sure some of them have better story, characters and all that but they all end up being dropped. This book is a 5 star in everything, at least for me, the story is getting updates, the story is great, the character are great and the mc is solid. I just hope he doesnt become too op too fast beacuse you will run out of stuff to make him do as nothing will be a challenge to him, and i hope, as the story is still in its early stages, that the mc doesnt turn out to be someone incapable of loving or stuff like that, i dont like emotionless characters, but i also hope he doesnt become too emotional (controlled and easily influenced into actions that arent good for him by his emtions) And that concludes my review. All in all this is a story with great potential and i cant wait to see how it develops.
Wish fullfilment, there is more system and gatcha than true story in each chapters. MC ask for a system that is not too easy but can summon DK 1min after receiving His system, he can store capital ship in is inventory or even a full deathstar. So, there is work to do to make that one readable. And the author as the guts to allready ask for money...
hey do you thank you could continue the book I got reincarnated in to fallout it was really good. Also the book so far is really great and and come on here every day to see if you upload a new chapter.
Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact ringdom_promptswriting@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
Hey there! Here are some web novel recommendations for whom share the same taste with me. If you like this story, my recommendations are worth a try! https://docs.google.com/document/d/19R5KkqHOOHSMDkF4fHscVmxWcYGh0OntYsv8NglzsQo/edit?usp=sharing
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
esto tiene pinta de ser muy bueno jeje , espero el autor no lo abandone , por cierto si hay romance en la historia mejor jajajaja , aguante los sith
yeah don't delete current chapters please it's a good reference to look back to, marker to see your progress as a writer and a good enough read to enjoy even with the few mistakes made.
I didn't finish first chapter before dropping this stupidity. Unrealistic start 140 characters 140 characters 140 characters 140 characters
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact kenreview@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Author after every single chapter forget what was in the previous chapter. plot holes are really big and i have read only 6 chapters. The MC a middle aged man with wife and daughter killed is like a teenage boy. its a Self Insert WishToHappenToMe story without decent MC, even though this system has 1 interesting ability. the rest is ****. im droping this...
No story development and gacha system determines almost everything. Mc ramdomly steps into a tutorial fantasy world that does not correlate whatsoever to the Star Wars Universe. Meh.
Cant stop reading lol love the star wars theme it makes it interesting and all the draws are ni e hope the mc gets some ultra rare items , hopefully getting a lightsaber that's op lol just saying haha , I love it
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the manner of writing is very easy to understand. i do not get confused on the scenes. i am also a sith fan so i immediately read the novel, i liked how the story progressed. i hope the author introduce more sith characters
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Obi-Wan Kenobi: [jumps down from the upper levels] Hello there. [All droids activate their weapons and surround Obi-Wan.] General Grievous: General Kenobi. You are a bold one. [to the Magna Guards] Kill him! [The Magna guards advance. Obi-wan pulls down a heating vent on top of them.] General Grievous: [to the droids] Back away! I will deal with this Jedi slime myself. Obi-Wan Kenobi: Your move. General Grievous: You fool. I've been trained in your Jedi arts by Count Dooku. [Grievous' two arms split into four. Each activates and wields a stolen lightsaber.] General Grievous: Attack, Kenobi!
Interesting story and you can see that the author tries very hard to ensure that everything is at a high level. You do a great job and don't worry about haters. So far the best Star Wars fanfic I read gives 5 stars, and stones for incentive. Keep doing great job.
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Imma tell you straight. This story ain't bad, but it ain't good either. It's too cliche. Too generalized. Cringe. And with system too. Not for me.
.............................................................................................................................................
Don't drop it take it slow and make a chatper when you can. This story is hard to write because its star war so we do not expect it to get loads of chatpers in a short while of time. and if your thinking of making a new novel that is like star wars but not hard to write try Stargate atlantis?
Need more and I hope that this story is not dropped or die from lack of support. Keep the physics of the reality of the star wars universe. ..............................................................................................
gggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd
Instead of the bucket why not make a new force skill that gets the water from the air and bath the water in the force and that is how the mc get water Instead of a magical bucket? love this book so far but do not destory the physics of the world.
Their are only two problems with this story that is the need for more character development and the second problem is the pace needs to be longer but still it is a great story. [img=update]
Судя по этой истории, мне не терпится увидеть больше (MC) и то, на что он способен в тот момент, мне нравится стиль письма, и я рад видеть, что нас ждет в следующих главах. Мне очень нравится этот роман. Будет больше глав
The base of the story is great, and it has amazing potential. I think you gave him to much power right off the bat. you need to grow the character more before a sudden power boost. It would be great to see the character have moral/emotional issues.
Truly one of the best out there. Sure some of them have better story, characters and all that but they all end up being dropped. This book is a 5 star in everything, at least for me, the story is getting updates, the story is great, the character are great and the mc is solid. I just hope he doesnt become too op too fast beacuse you will run out of stuff to make him do as nothing will be a challenge to him, and i hope, as the story is still in its early stages, that the mc doesnt turn out to be someone incapable of loving or stuff like that, i dont like emotionless characters, but i also hope he doesnt become too emotional (controlled and easily influenced into actions that arent good for him by his emtions) And that concludes my review. All in all this is a story with great potential and i cant wait to see how it develops.
Wish fullfilment, there is more system and gatcha than true story in each chapters. MC ask for a system that is not too easy but can summon DK 1min after receiving His system, he can store capital ship in is inventory or even a full deathstar. So, there is work to do to make that one readable. And the author as the guts to allready ask for money...
hey do you thank you could continue the book I got reincarnated in to fallout it was really good. Also the book so far is really great and and come on here every day to see if you upload a new chapter.
Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact ringdom_promptswriting@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
Hey there! Here are some web novel recommendations for whom share the same taste with me. If you like this story, my recommendations are worth a try! https://docs.google.com/document/d/19R5KkqHOOHSMDkF4fHscVmxWcYGh0OntYsv8NglzsQo/edit?usp=sharing
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
esto tiene pinta de ser muy bueno jeje , espero el autor no lo abandone , por cierto si hay romance en la historia mejor jajajaja , aguante los sith
yeah don't delete current chapters please it's a good reference to look back to, marker to see your progress as a writer and a good enough read to enjoy even with the few mistakes made.
I didn't finish first chapter before dropping this stupidity. Unrealistic start 140 characters 140 characters 140 characters 140 characters
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact kenreview@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Author after every single chapter forget what was in the previous chapter. plot holes are really big and i have read only 6 chapters. The MC a middle aged man with wife and daughter killed is like a teenage boy. its a Self Insert WishToHappenToMe story without decent MC, even though this system has 1 interesting ability. the rest is ****. im droping this...
No story development and gacha system determines almost everything. Mc ramdomly steps into a tutorial fantasy world that does not correlate whatsoever to the Star Wars Universe. Meh.
Cant stop reading lol love the star wars theme it makes it interesting and all the draws are ni e hope the mc gets some ultra rare items , hopefully getting a lightsaber that's op lol just saying haha , I love it
👍........................................................................................................................................................................👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍........................................................................................................................................................................👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
the manner of writing is very easy to understand. i do not get confused on the scenes. i am also a sith fan so i immediately read the novel, i liked how the story progressed. i hope the author introduce more sith characters
DunDunDunDumDunDunDunDunDun~~~~😀😀😀🙃😗😘😇😇🙂😇😚😜😜😚😘😚🙂😇😘😇😗😗😙🙃😙🙃🥰😘😘😇😗😙😉😚😁🤑😘🤩🤩😍😊🙂😆😘😊😜🤪😚🤪🤪🤪🤗🤗😜🤑🤩🤑😛😝😜😝🙂😚🙂😇🙃😇🙃😇😃😇😗😚
Obi-Wan Kenobi: [jumps down from the upper levels] Hello there. [All droids activate their weapons and surround Obi-Wan.] General Grievous: General Kenobi. You are a bold one. [to the Magna Guards] Kill him! [The Magna guards advance. Obi-wan pulls down a heating vent on top of them.] General Grievous: [to the droids] Back away! I will deal with this Jedi slime myself. Obi-Wan Kenobi: Your move. General Grievous: You fool. I've been trained in your Jedi arts by Count Dooku. [Grievous' two arms split into four. Each activates and wields a stolen lightsaber.] General Grievous: Attack, Kenobi!
Interesting story and you can see that the author tries very hard to ensure that everything is at a high level. You do a great job and don't worry about haters. So far the best Star Wars fanfic I read gives 5 stars, and stones for incentive. Keep doing great job.
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