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Transmigrated Into Harry Potter With a System
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Aaron was an ordinary boy living a peaceful life, but one day that came crashing down as he was diagnosed with a terminal disease. Living the remainder of his life in the hospital reading books waiting for death to come. And that's when his fateful day came, slowly closing his eyes for all eternity...
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This is my first time writing, I may be inexperienced but please take care of me. If you guys have any suggestions or think something is wrong please let me know, I always appreciate constructive criticism.
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it's very good waiting for chapters😊😊😊😊.................................................................................. ...............
Writing Quality: It's amazing compared to some of the other stories on this app, there are little to none grammar issues, good job 5/5. Story Developement: Every chapter is filled with a lot of content, and could be slowed down/split into a couple more chapters instead and having them be rewritten to make the story flow better than going from his world to the hp world in an instant. 4/5 Character Design: There is really no character design other than the obligatory hair colour, eye colour, skin colour. That's it, if you were to have gone this route you should have found some images on Pinterest and commented on the descriptions, it would have made it easier for the readers to picture the character and for you so you have to write less. 3/5 Updating Stability: The story by the time im posting this comment is relatively new and so I don't really know. 3/5 World Building: It's harry potter, I could piece the entire story line by just reading fanfictions, so there isn't much to explain ( Maybe the author will introduce some more plotlines later on in the story ) but the author has introduced/created some OCS which is quite nice. Notes: The mc acts like an Isekai protagonist, trying to get back to his earth to meet and revive his mother. This sort of the MCs goals and motivation is a turnoff even for me ( I've a couple thousand books on this site, a lot of them are wish-fufillment trash ). another turnoff for me is the harem, I despise harem to an ungodly degree, not because it's bad but because it's so overused and overdone that all harem stories or the plotline of his the harem is made is always the same and will always be similar to another which destroys any chance of developing that plotline.
Good story but the update schedule really hurts a good premis and possibly amasing story the just could not be fleshed out or shown because of the overall lack of content
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The fIrst chapter had me hooked. honestly i hope the author keeps at it. A system in Harry Potter, although done before, is always an interesting read. i really hope the author thaes the time to finish the story.