Trying to Survive Inside This Forsaken World

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gaijsnsn

IMPORTANT: I NEED YOUR HELPHello to new and old readers of this novel! It's been awhile since I posted here, because I've been working on a new concept for the story to go through in order to make my novel easier and more entertaining to read! I'm currently publishing before everything is finished because I'm going to send this into the JNovel Competition and I need your guy's help so I can make sure I make at least third place! Let's aim high together

LV 3

captiun

It's good! Especially the character design and the world background. You're in for a beautifully imagined fantasy world, told through the eyes of a young lady in great detail. Maybe you'll consider the pace slow, but it's 100% needed. It serves to build a world that is much different from ours. It's a good read and I actually like the characters. The author has a great imagination, doubt. Her universe differs significantly from classic fantasy, and yet, everything fits.

LV 1

Acylith

the worldbuilding is rich and solid. each of the characters have their own distinct personalities which make them shine individually. the writing is also of high quality, and the use of descriptions were immersive and narrated wonderfully. i'm interested to learn more about the world and the people the MC(for non-spoiler reasons) meets! good job and keep it up :)

LV 13

Akira_Monadelle

The chapters are short but they are beautifully structured and wonderfully written. There are little to no grammatical errors making this novel a very very easy and understandable read. As the story progressed I couldn't help but keep reading. The author paid keen attention to character development and certainly kept me intrigued. A lovely lovely novel 🤗

LV 14

US_DreamerDon

I'm impressed on the updating of the story so far! There are a lot of great points in the writing starting from Chapter 1. I do like how the author separates between the 1st POV and 3rd POV. And the reader isn't jarred because of it. I do have a nick pick though- When fleeing for one's life, the body enters a fight or flight mode. These modes are full of adrenaline and your heart will be thumping really fast, but light pain will seem to disappear. It all comes flooding back once you come down from the adrenaline. I do highly recommend this story and I wish the author good luck with the updates!

LV 2

PGODofficial

The story grasps the attention of the reader from the first moment. A well written protagonist makes is definitely a plus for me. However, the writing style could use some work.

LV 1

Easy_Tiger

This is a really enjoyable adventure. I love the fictional world the author has created here. The glossary at the start is quite handy to give the reader an idea of what kinds of beings will inhabit the universe and get them into the right frame of mind. The characters in this are all colorful, diverse and unique, making this feel like a very substantial piece of fiction that is well-developed and carried by the author's fantastic imagination. The writing style is light and snappy, making for an easy and enjoyable read at any time of the day. There are some light traces of humor throughout too, further adding to the fun, and breaking up some of the more serious moments. I love the direction where this is heading and it is safe to say this story is in good hands with a very talented author. Everybody reading this should check this story out ASAP!

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Nr_Yet1208

This was a good read. The writing quality was pretty good and probably better than most wn. The plot moved smoothly (good pacing). And if you like Light novels, then this is your jam. I'd totally recommend this.

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kuhaku_sora

Your writing style is superb among the authors here in Webnovel (or even in other platforms. The occurrences in the story are all detailed and well-written, so I expect this novel to bloom in no time! You could even join one of the contest in webnovel, mate, and win awesome goodies while you're at it! These are the few things that I'd like to point out, so feel free to disagree or agree with what I'm going to say. I noticed that you add -kun during dialogues, but it was not consistent. It would be better if all of the characters there (assuming they're all Japanese) uses proper honorics at each characters. The scenes were epic and written excellently! However, there are some few sentences here and there that you I think you missed showing than telling (for me) There is part where you mentioned "couldn't sooth Hatayo's anxiousness". It would be better if you can express it in details rather than telling he was anxious. Also, you could replace some adverbs in the story with a richer verb. One example (from your chapters) that I found was "boots clanked loudly" you could say that the boots blared a clanking sounds or along those lines. This is definitely well-written! I love the story, and I can't wait to read more about this!

LV 12

kpthe1

First of all the glossary at the beginning explaining the races and classes cleared up the doubts the World background. Generally, some readers prefer these explainations to be integrated into the plot after few chapters but I personally preface this. Coming to the story, it is new and refreshing. The writing quality is clear making the book more impressive. Great Work!!!

LV 2

Andrew_Oak

Very interesting story. Good start and fast development of events. Clear and attentive detailing of the world and descriptions of the characters are pleasant to read. I hope to meet an unexpected storyline turn and get a strong impression. Good luck author. thanks for the fantasy.

LV 3

Dedz_

Writing quality's good! Every chapter is long that it felt like 3 chaps! That's a perk for a long chappy! The story development, as well as the world background, goes well as most of the characters are definitely panted as real people. I'm sure the author put a lot of effort into them. If you're hesitating to read this, just click the 1st chapter and you can't escape!

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meixiaolian

The author's way of writing it hooked me. It's just too descriptive and its one of the ingredient an author must have: a good writing style. The author's writing style is just 100. If you are into fantasy romance, give this a try!

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Madym

Amazing work. I have to say from the very first chapter this work is intriguing. It is just like those horror or dark movies where the movie starts with MC running for his life and people chasing him. It gives exactly the same feeling, and then you hear "Catch Her. She's a witch." Now here the story becomes very interesting and after that the scene where she wokes up and it turns out to be dream but even then we can see that there is no relief on her face but she's still scared. Okay no more spoiling. I just wanted to show how intriguing and interesting this work is. Once you'll dive in it you'll just keep getting deeper and deeper with not wanting to come out unless until you get the answers. I can definitely say if you'll give it a try you'll not regret and there are sufficient chapters too so it'll be an amazing journey of you'll read it. In the end, well done author even though it's your first work, you seems well versed in this genre.

LV 4

Mel_Aniv

Okay new readers, please give this novel a chance 🙏. The author will surely surprise you in many ways. Okay, review proper, this novel has good execution of the concept and the dialogues were also good. Very lifelike and realistic for me. Not everyone can pull it off so easily. It was like butter being sliced by a knife. Characters were fleshed out and so far, so good! Kudos and good luck! It was an amazing experience for my part and wished for other readers to share my experience too! haha 😂 Gracias!

LV 4

Maryixxx

Read few of the chapters and all I can say is that; it's an engaging story so far. Such an amazing and great novel of yours Author. I can't deny the fact that this one is interesting and at the same time a refreshing story for readers. Keep writing, Author.

LV 10

BlindBandit

Something only a real cultured man can appreciate, *nod* A hidden gem . . . Harem, my friend... it's nice to see a fellow man of culture appreciating what nature has give us, anyhow, this novel is good to read, the plot is nice, writing quality is excellent as well... Keep up the good work author! Kudos to you!

LV 13

Dark_Scholars

I enjoyed the characters in the book. Very Interactive. Not cliche at all. The writing quality is a cut above most web novels here and I enjoyed the story and the world background. It was a really good read. Pity it was harem😭

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MrWritter

I recommend this story to everyone who comes here looking for a good story, with an interesting and constant story, my only complaint is the fact that it only has 5 chapters. Well detailed and thoroughly polished, for sure the author spent a lot of time thinking about each argument and knew how to make good connections.