With The Power Of Gods In MHA

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dewon07

will he go for harem? will he go for harem? will he go for harem? will he go for harem? will he go for harem? will he go for harem? will he go for harem? will he go for harem? will he go for harem? will he go for harem? will he go for harem? will he go for harem?

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creepycatisawesone

Ok So WRITING Quality: The Book is good, It starts a bit awkward as the writing for teh first three chapters isn't smooth but it later improves but as I only have 6 chapters to judge, So the analysis is not perfect. STORY DEVELOPMENT Story Development is fast yet stable, it takes off at a pace good enough for a Fanfic CHACTER DESIGN: He appears to be a bit of a naive character in the beginning but well I guess that is how it should be But I am not Sure if this is because author wants the character to be like that or because he is new at writing. But if you improve his personality over time then it's alright. Updates l: ..... World Background: This is a place which needs improvement as author must understand that not all people on the platform are indians and / or Hindus so a picture of the deities on the chapter comments and a chapter in beginning explaining Various deities in a short paragraph of about 50 words might help. Because someone might actually think of Hanuman as a monkey rather than the humanoid form u are used to. And I must say I don't see the mc going mad ruthless , so if u r looking for a psychopath go somewhere else Lastly I would say that u should describe the characters more or post a photo of theirs because it's hard to visualise Also describ the system. Better do it as a rewrite of first 3 chapters if u have time Eg. "What is your Quirk?" asked the doctor with a thoughtful look on his face. I was confused and thinking what to answer , when suddenly I heard a ding accompanied by a sweet female voice. [*ding* Host is recommended to say that he got the God Avatar System. It would be further cleared to sir after sometime.] I was freaked out on hearing the sound but as I had no better option, I just decided to repeat the words to the doctor. Or something like that. You get it right Anyway write it ur own way I just tried to match ur style. I really like ur creativity and it's a great idea . Peace Out

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PP_Puncher

Shameless author doing this to increase my reach but please write comment review it and help me to improve it. The first few chapters are a bit slow but will get better.english is My third language please pardon

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Daoist086643

Great book slow on the start but picks up speed really quickly and has a new concept that I like Would definitely recommend and advise to be patient in the starting.

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Ham_Han

A great read if a bit slow on the start has a bit of grammatical errors but is good overall it starts getting fast really soon.Would deffinitely recommend.

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Mortifer

So a critical review. Grammar is atrocious. Dialogues are written continously within the same paragraph. (e.g can you give me this and that sir? Not yet, you need this and that instead. Oh OK sir) Which is painful to read. A reader recommended fixing it by at least adding a "" (e.g. "can you give me this and that, sir?"said person a." not yet, you need this and that instead" according to person b "oh ok sir" replied person A in return.) in the dialogues to distinguish between speakers to which the author replied but completely ignored through the following chapters. While the example is not perfect, at least adding in that few "" would make it significantly easier to read. Unfortunately, the author chose not to. B Characters are not described at all and the paragraphs are huge walls of texts. Also the author can't even be bothered to describe the things he's adding with the quirk (like the avatar thingies). The first 5 avatar had been described by a reader instead of the author. Parents are mentioned with no names and descriptions (or I missed it completely, if I did then forgive me) World building is messed up. Basically MHA but the author decided to include india(?). Lots of native words used without any proper explanation as if the author expects his readers to automatically understand what he is referring to. Update stability I have no idea as I could not stick around long enough to notice. Hence the middle ground 3 star rating Same as stability, I gave story story development a 3 because the other aspects I mentioned already turned me off so much that I can't even proceed with the story.

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Kotasume

I like it that the mc has a power where he can act like a god(only read to 4chp)but the problem is that i feel that the mc has no goal and the system was basically slaving him anyway its good if you are looking toward the bright side and i was still confuse on how the story work anyway............ zoom in.zoom out.zoom in.zoom in. sound effect.