Webnovel Author: NxtDoorDuDE - Novel Collection

try 'Losing money to be a tycoon'funny one too.

Yes, I totally agree with this is a fanfic. Pace was good then face of story changed like flick of coin. It fanfic so author can do whatever he wants. It just my opinion that this flick just brock the rhythm.

Good work bro!!! I should say godly work for fanfic : Naruto. I love this fanfic. well in last some chapters you gone over the top but you already indicated that this going to happen sooner than later.

what should I say... Starting of story was good but gone down to drain later. I mean a planet level inflated to universe level. And it's inflated very fast in fight with marines was alright as you put in supposed to be but then, well I nothing else to say as writer's imagination. Your writing quality was better than me so 5-star so for speed of updating. Character design was good but not on full potential. Story development was good until just before end. I am not criticizing you but in good stories we don't inflat story like this. There is many stories where introduce bigger world then he was writing but that thing take process not like here where we just dump info at once. For future, please introduce bigger world step by step, like planet to solar system to star system to galaxy...

no more gay so just remove gay tag. I want you to just remove gay tag, that's all

Redgar_347, I already taken care of conflicted chapters so rectify your review too.

sorry for this chapter! I will rewrite it in 2 days since my pc keyboard is broken. I was just trying different things and feels like it's didn't go well.

man I tried it once and later in same chapter dropped it. Now it's straight, I am thinking of changing it entirely nowadays.