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Honestly, I didn't even care about the NTR in the beginning because no emotional connection was created. So I just read past it. Still, the story just isn't that good in my opinion. I think the concept is interesting but the execution needs some work. Maybe try a rewrite where you slow the story down a bit.

This is actually a good story. Not every Hp fanfic needs to have a character that is extremely talented from the get-go at everything. Also while I can agree that certain actions from the protagonist touch on the "forbidden list" of stuff to do in an HP fanfic, I don't think it detracts from the story.