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cat video is way better than this, what utter shit of an author

Because fujitora is the character while the MC is is one using his template the kid himself is the arrogant one not the template overriding his original personality

im done no more reading Chinese novel, it slowly kill my brain cell, awkward dialog, story is Chinese bullshit making me wanting to cause a mass killing of Chinese author.

but the character is an OP one so why fear the golden lion

everything is cringe in this, the OPMC is annoying already, the martial art that the character learn make no sense it's obvious the school is a MC Dojo getting a black belt before 12 years old not even prodigy is given that before they reach an appropriate age in a real Dojo. the dialog is just unnatural, might as well get rid of the family and start em at the orphanage. 50 chapter in is nothing but info dumb are you writing a story or a fucking wiki author. why does every single fanfic need to be in a first person, does any of you aware how hard it is to write this way, why not using a limited third person that way you are t going to be stuck info dumping on us reader.

what are you on about, write properly, did you mean Harry see Voldermort at the train station of something.

Interesting start but the story stretch and take about 100+ to finish the chamber of secret arc while it can be finish with only 90 chapter with better pacing.

Not my cuppa tea, the beginning is fun enough to read, but the system shown in this is something that I do not enjoy reading. The plot armour is strong that include the character's luck which diminished my enjoyment of reading it. Prefer reading fanfic that obey the world law after making it whatever the author want. good time waster, but not enough for glowing review

a fun read, the writing is enjoyable, Those light chapter also help making the story enjoyable, so far so good will be waiting for more chapter.

previous on is better, the comedy is just meh, wait until chapter 23 is not a way to hook your audience. the first two chapter is extremely cringe, just start when he already a Ninja and build the story from there is far better.

wasn't this style of third-person writing considered a "limited third-person" where It is written from the point of view of the character

then how someone suppose to review it then you troglodytes.

the beginning is not that great and seem off, thing happen just to further the plot. the batman debut where the story pick up and fun to read, was expecting a batman beyond outfit rather than the original batman but so far so good.

I like your work and idea and wish you nothing but the best