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I’ve gone as far as the underground bunker and have to say this is hard core plot armor. A system and now a secure facility with armor etc etc and the AI just says “sure I’ll reboot and you can have control.” Let’s just give him a mysterious shelter that’s self sufficient and automated so he can just play games and watch tv… finds a few women for sure and they will either treat him like a savior or goddn case

Half way in to the first chapter and the MC is trained from 4 to be a super soldier with martial training from young with multiple arts.… let’s see if it gets interesting or it is a wate of time with a 3.5 rating.

I don’t like to rant and rave normally but it’s needed here. From the first chapter all we see is the mic chugging beer and chain smoking. 30-40% of your story is filler with the mc’s habits of smoking and drinking adding nothing to the story other than annoying readers with waisted time and content. This is not character development so what’s your purpose? Unlimited money and he stocks up on cigarettes and alcohol the day before the apocalypse instead of food water etc. In two and a half months he could have found isolated farm property, stocked it with supplies, obtained building construction materials and vehicles, and have it functional with solar power and water wells or stream. It may get better but I’ve stopped at 17th chapter.

I read far into this story annoyed at the constant emotional collapse of the MC coupled with the acceptance of 99% of the women who show him affection. Danmachi is one of my favorite fanfic worlds with it’s opportunities for growth. By the time he starts world hopping I’m struggling to maintain interest and eventually dropped it. I forgot to consider the MCs origin later in the works. I cant guarantee that I’ll dive back into the story, but it was one of my favorites before I got to that point and I would suggest it to others as long as you remember his origins and age.

I loved this fanfic. I can’t point out many issues so it’s worth a perfect rating in my book. The MC is a nice refreshing choice that is unique and doesn’t drive you crazy with emotions, decisions, etc.

There are too many inconsistencies with the fanfic and the source. Using magic without being caught by the ministry as you rob gangsters, break into police stations, assault dark wizards is impossible. The great Merlin family of the 28 is a near empty vault. The Mc can do occulmency without any training like it’s nothing. The Mc can flip out tech and make it seem too easy. How can dumbledooe and gringots goblins be suppressed by a 11-12 year olds glare and threats.

Can’t stand the childish Mc who wastes the system that they get. He acts like he’s 10 five or take a year. The rambling on without controlling what he says combined with the childish antics is too much and I didn’t even finish the first arc…

I have read over 1250 chapters of this story and it just gets more anointing every time. MC is drunk on power always killing who ever crosses him no matter what the consequences are. Every where he goes there is an auction, some ruins, or an inheritance that’s just about to happen he is so excited and knowing about, despite the novel showing he’s from another continent. One moment of showing off leads to sects and families sacrificing quotas for him without any history or loyalty to them. He has a system that prevents bottlenecks and nothing but time on his hands while knowing it’s a wuxia world filled with countless dangers, but sits around going with the flow instead of grinding. I get annoyed with EVERY battle starting with smack talk. This rant could continue but I’ll stop before I get any angrier.

First and foremost the MC is a selfish and immature idiot. Supposedly a genius above the rest, yet he is closer to the point I’d say 10 year old mentality. He makes decision after decision without any consent from the others risking his and their lives non stop. After meeting the god that gave you the system you curse and belittle him the entire meeting demanding to not be chosen… how selfish can you possibly be? Give up everything that’s helping you and your family because of a temper tantrum. That alone annoyed me to the point of dropping this. I have no suggestions on how to fix this without redoing it. Great possibilities but yeah…

This had potential in the beginning… but then it went south quick. The touch a book to instantly memorize skill partnered with the history of stealing an advanced alien races entire library then printing it out micro format to memorize billions of books is a bit much. Using magic to make anything from basic materials such as pc. Computers, pills, ANYTHING… the deeper further you go in to the story the deeper the craziness gets. At some point the system is forgotten while the tech takes over till the end. Let’s not forget that ridiculous ending out of no where. Let’s just end a story in a quick chapter…

The armpit licking… never figured out how that became a big fetish.[img=faceslap]

Spoiler alert Onimusha, devil may cry, black panther, x-men, supreme master, shield, resident evil, and John wic are all crammed together in the first 30 chapters. That’s too much for me. The MC is 8, but is able to withstand lethal or crippling blows constantly, manage rifles, pistols, grenades, etc. with Matrix style combat moves, break in to umbrella Corp unseen stealing data then taking on two tyrant/nemisis hybrids with demon DNA, join the continental as an assassin, fight toe to toe with 20 assassins then John Wic, and speak with Nick Fury as if he’s superior even threatening him without consequences. I’m not sure what else I could say about it other than this goes above and beyond fanfic into a mess of content thrown into a blender. I appreciate the author’s attempt in this story, but I don’t think it’s content can be well written.

I have to say that I loved this novel. The MC taking the grandfather role on everyone instead of the harem route was well thought out and executed. I can’t come up with any complaints that I would mention here other than I’m sad it’s over. Great work and I hope to read more from you.