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Dialogue really is a tab robotic, they all sound the same. The changes in PoV is also jarring, which doesn’t help how the tone of each character is basically the same. Also, your MC is too trusting and seems so naive for an adult.
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Dialogue really is a tab robotic, they all sound the same. The changes in PoV is also jarring, which doesn’t help how the tone of each character is basically the same. Also, your MC is too trusting and seems so naive for an adult.
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