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If Ethan swims as a salmon through the dragon gate will he not evolve to become a dragon ?
“Go, my little Salmon,” Mimir said with affection. “I pray that your journey against the current of time and space will bear fruit. You have suffered thousands of years of loneliness.”
Fantasy · Elyon
If you murdered someone in my territory I would publicly execute you by extracting your soul.
There was no need to kill Tatjana Moiaralin. The situation was not the same as it had been when Michael summoned Cleave Fenrir. Tatjana was of no danger, whereas it had been the complete opposite with Cleave Fenrir.
Fantasy · HideousGrain
I understand that walls won’t happen in the jungle, but are formations or magic barriers not a thing?
Michael and his people were camouflaged from enemies and gained resources from the Untamed Jungle. In return, they nourished the Untamed Jungle by removing the aggressive trees and bushes that were stealing the nutrition of the older trees. At the same time, the Untamed Jungle received various nutrients from the Greater Nature Spirit and the fertilizer brought by Michael. Whether the fertilizer was Awakened, or Native corpses or proper fertilizer didn't matter.
Fantasy · HideousGrain
I feel like he doesn’t pay attention to his finances or romance options enough. This is a young man, and no matter how mentally traumatized he is it’s more than normal to care about those things. Especially if you are a lord, you put in a lot about how he cares for his subordinates but I don’t feel like he does. It feels more like he feels bad because he makes a mistake, not because lives are lost. He attended a school where he should have been taught basic finance and territory management skills yet he flounders like he never paid attention in class. I would love to see some character growth, because the novel is overall good. But in 600 chapters I haven’t seen the mc really care about anyone except his brother, at this point I want the brother to die just to wake the mc up.
[A/N#2: I know that I've been asking this way too often these days, but what do you think is missing about the story? Are there any major mistakes you've noticed, or things that should be mentioned more in the chapters? Your honest critique will help me improve the story going forward.
Fantasy · HideousGrain
Huh. Thought this was a necromancy novel
Physique: Shadow Monarch Physique
Fantasy · Zero_writer
Easiest weapons to learn and use are usually a spear, club, or mace. Swords takes years of practice to be mediocre
In the past two years, he had also devoted time to learning swordsmanship. Although his talent with swords could be considered subpar, he had managed to master basic swordsmanship during that period.
Fantasy · Zero_writer
No need to introduce main characters with partial introduction, it’s better to give a clear distinction on age
Evan tried to calm his mind, and stood up. He appeared to be around 18 years old, with jet-black hair and eyes. His pale white skin contrasted with his hair and eye color. Standing at approximately 180cm tall, he possessed a remarkably handsome appearance, considering his power level.
Fantasy · Zero_writer
Please stop, I have killed off MCs for less
Ethan had also taken out his Moulding Ball and transferred it into a Pitchfork, while Chloe had already summoned her Fire Fox, Kon, ready to fight at a moment’s notice.
Fantasy · Elyon
So he’s spineless
The young lady with light-brown hair noticed Ethan’s gaze at her and immediately raised her clenched fist, which made the him subconsciously take a step back.
Fantasy · Elyon
Rather boring
“Looks like the Dud Manor is getting a new member today,” Professor Rinehart announced.
Fantasy · Elyon
He would be further along if he actually summoned people by the boat load
Fortunately, he didn't have to rush his advance to the next Tier. He was not in a rush, after all.
Fantasy · HideousGrain
I feel like he is branching to far, I get why it might be fun to try new things but it feels like he’s abandoning the spirits
"I'll probably miss my Ghost Hand Spell…" Eustace mused as he lay on his bed. He also felt quite tired after traveling for quite some time, and he certainly deserved a long rest.
Fantasy · xlntz
Thought that dude died, or was it a different person who had duplication
He had a monopoly, and he sincerely doubted that anyone could take it away from him. Even if that were to happen in the future…was it really important? By the time someone else with a similar Soultrait as Extraction appeared on the horizon, Michael would already be a powerhouse that towered above the High Society. Was it really necessary for him to fear losing his monopoly over the Soultrait Symbols and Soul Techniques?
Fantasy · HideousGrain
I’m just going to call him viper…for obvious reasons
This "Mamba Viper" seemed to have a strict personality and didn't like joking around.
Games · FETI
I would’ve taken claw marks over lions face
Double Marking
Games · Galanar
Imagine finding out you have been murdering people for months
Being in a game, he decided he didn't want to be the goody two shoes he always was, and started doing evil deeds. He discovered so many new poisonous plants in the Elven forests; he felt euphoria.
Games · Galanar
That’ unusual for the cold down to increase
Cooldown: 5 minutes -> 10 minutes
Games · Galanar
It is a part of America. America is a continent not a country.
"You Canadiens are always trying to uplift yourselves to America's standard! You are a waste of space of a country!" He howled, ripping away the microphone on his shirt and throwing it to the ground.
Games · Galanar
Oh good. Human.
Race: Human/Carbon-based
Fantasy · GREAT
Palm sized but they can become human sized if they want to
Since he had stocked up on magic powers before leaving the academy, this also meant that he also absorbed Fairy Magic by kissing Ruby and the other Fairies in the Garden of the academy.
Strongest Warlock - Wizard World Irregular
Fantasy · Elyon