Webnovel Author: Datguypi - Fanfic Collection

Going into this story, I had no idea what to expect. Thankfully, I didn't need to wait long since the first story was amazingly written, was realistic in how it played out and how the characters interacted, and quite frankly ended with a more satisfying conclusion than Kono Oneesan wa Fiction desu!? could have had. (It's ending was absolutely terrible and I recommend you never read it or risk an aneurysm from the sheer waste of space-time it is.) The writing quality is marvelous compared to almost every single other story that I've read on this site and the others of its type, and it also kept its stories quality amazing as well, which is nothing short of a miracle for these sites. The only real downside to these stories is that they aren't more vicious, but that is purely my own personality coming into play. Aside from all that though, I would actually believe that these short stories are in fact fables from some type of Bible, and if they are, then I would very much like to know the organisation so I can join them. Overall, this work deserves a 10/10 for fighting the good fight and giving satisfying conclusions to these disgusting situations.

Honestly, I really wanted this to do good. But after having read 3 whole chapters, I have to give up. The premise, while not wholly unique, is something not seen often (in regards to the stand and not the isekai portion). However, the writing quality and conflicting information we're given are just so little and too much all at once. Show, don't tell. Instead of directly telling us about this rigorous training plan his mother has made for him, have him go through it while having a monologue to pass the time. Don't mention abilities he doesn't have, omit them so the audience can deduce that the character hasn't discovered them yet. Keep it simple, and please don't make unironic cringe sentences or phrases. Hyper rigorous is too cringe, say instead, An extreme training plan for a boy his age, or at least something like it. It pads out the word count while keeping it informative and non cringe inducing. Other than these nitpicks and just you getting someone to read over what you've written, you also apparently need to be more proactive with your story. An MC that isn't acting like an MC, or even living his own life is not well received by anyone.

That would be because this is more likely a poorly done translation with no editing done to it.

You missed the C and my OCD IS KILLING MEEEEEEE!!