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great writing style.
Also, why in the world is everything "Great" in these sorts of novels? There's never just a Blue Lotus Hall or a White Rose Hall. It's always "Great Jade" this and "Heavenly Great" that. For once in my life, I'd like to see a damn Wuxia hall that is not great. I wonder if such a place even exists. In any case, moving right along.
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Eastern · Danteus
I think u should split up ur dialogue a tad bit more.
"Oh... Sorry to keep you waiting in suspense like that, Suntao. I was in the forest practicing my technique. I've been working on creating the greatest sword style in all the land. I have combined every technique that I have seen in my wide travels of the martial arts world into one single sword style. The Soul of the Unknown Swordsman. I have the utmost belief that if I were able to have complete control of this maimed right arm once again, I would become the most powerful swordsman in the lands after practicing for one final year."
Return of the Unknown Swordsman
Eastern · Danteus
You comment on your chapters so much.
ch 32 DO YOU WATCH THE RAIN?
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Urban · AuHNG
this is too many words for me.
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Urban · AuHNG
what.
"Hi guys, welcome to my channel! It's ya boy, Lucius, with my best friends, Sinclair and Samjo."
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Urban · AuHNG
how we should all talk to our cousins.
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Urban · AuHNG
real. I did robotics. it was pain.
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Urban · AuHNG
kinda cool.
ch 11 THE GYM TEACHER'S BRAIN.mesh IS VALUED BY SOCIETY
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Urban · AuHNG
This is what I aspire to me.
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Urban · AuHNG
feels like something i would see out of a 2000's teen movie.
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Urban · AuHNG
I think the chapter profiles are what's making the chapter seem long, but the chapter itself is not super long.
ch 0 7 MY COUSINS PEER-PRESSURE ME INTO GOING TO SCHOOL
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Urban · AuHNG
feel like instead of saying returner, she should say ChongSe Ze, or something, which means returner in Chinese. Will add to the vibe. And then obviously the main character can be like? Returner? What does that mean.
"Zhi-zhi. You know that what you have asked of me is the only thing that I will ever wish for as long as I have memory of you. Unfortunately, the Gods above have deemed you a 'Returner'. We shall not get our wish." Meiying spoke in a pained voice, as if something were stopping her from explaining further.
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Eastern · Danteus