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My pen-name is Venerable Linfeng. I write random genres novels. Fav Genres:Martial Arts, Action, Magic, Game,WuXia, Fan-Fiction, Xianxia, System etc

2018-12-20 Joined Ascension Island

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All right, your fellow writer here! This is the second review and serious review. Here are the reasons why I gave this book 3 stars: 1. Writing Quality: Everything in here is indeed readable and understandable, but it is not in the right way. Since you use 3rd person narration as your writing style, make sure that everything is in the past tense. It’s true that everything is readable, but some readers still prefer or pursue the perfect writing style where grammars are fit to read instead. If you have time, be sure to edit them seriously. Punctuation, glaringly wrong grammar, typos, unusual phrase, etc,. 2. Updating Stability: In this period of time, the schedule is 0ch/week, but I gave 3 stars hoping the author will be able to change it and make it stable in the future. 3. Story Development: The pacing is not stable at all! Don’t move from one scene to another too quickly or too slowly. If things have to be skipped, be sure to express it down, don’t write a random and unnecessary scene. Don’t end a scene unclearly. Don’t add info dump.(eg. don’t introduce unnecessary characters) But note that info dump is still necessary, just don’t add too much in one chapter. 4. Character Design: If you have your own unique protagonist, that would be the best. I’ve seen too much typical protagonists nowadays now. Also, introduce your MC a bit more clearly, because it’s hard to distinguish who is your MC if one only reads roughly instead of thoroughly. I gave 2 stars because I saw quite a bunch of typical characters in here. 5. World Background: If your story is Western-Fantasy based, don’t mix in the “Sensei” or similar Japanese stuff, only use the Westerners’ words. I gave 3 stars because it’s a fantasy world, a world where it’s big enough that anything can happen and exist. That’s all for my rough review which can be counted as initial step for improvements for your book. ✌️✌️✌️
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Replied to ImmortalNineFaps
It's a secret, you will find it out later, hehe.

The so-called eternal life, for some people, might not be a gift from heaven, but a curse!

90,000 Years of Longevity

90,000 Years of Longevity

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Thank you for your reminder and sorry for that, it was actually an idiom. It means, he already has a few enemies blocking him, so what if another troublemaker comes? He still did not them in his eyes the slightest bit. But since I was lazy to explain, I edited this dialogue to a simpler term now.
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Is there a need to insult me like this? What I wanted to portray here is about human’s desire, about human’s nature. If you were to replace him, would you want to lose your entire wealth, your entire power just like that? Also, this guy did not know how much strength Ye Bei has, and unless Ye Bei showed more horrible power than that, would he choose to give up. If you are a 13 yo reading this, then this novel is not for you. For a little kid who only knows how to express your emotion carelessly like this isn’t suitable to read a novel that needs deep understanding of human’s nature to understand.

But when he gently closed the door of the safe house again, those blank eyes immediately revealed a terrifying killing intent, "Everything in the Zhao Family is the result of our hard work, even if I die, I will never give it away with both hands... The legendary 'master', no matter who you are, how powerful and awesome you are, I will never give up like this... The old man is afraid of you, but I am not afraid!" His voice was extremely small, after saying this, Zhao Changcun's legs immediately stood straight, and his whole body exuded coldness.

90,000 Years of Longevity

90,000 Years of Longevity

Martial Arts · Venerable_Linfeng

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