First it's "Slope Sheep" but then the boss turns up & it's a "Goat"? you do know that their not even the same species? just because they're mammals, have 4 hoofed legs, eat grass etc does not make goats & sheep the same. is this like when in translated novels rats & mice are considered the same thing? if i was the author I'd consider changing the "Goat" to "Ram" (or even "Slope Ram")
ch 0 8 8, First Kill at Level 4 Boss!_1
Games · Dull Fireball
i must admit the writer does have the ability to insert a sense of creepiness into their story, which as someone who has read alot of horror isn't as easy as it seems, especially as i'm actually deeaaddd........ WwooooUooooHoooaha. keep up the good work 👍
ch 17 Task 017 begins_1
Urban · Golden Dreamland
even though the MC has been in this new world (dimension) for three months i think the author should insert a bit about this world like where (country/city) he is. if he's in L.A (Hollywood) or it's equivalent in this world it wouldn't be Yuan but Dollars, if he's still in China then Yuan is okay but Pppllleeeaaassssee don't have the translation switch back & forth between 2 or more currency's
ch 0 2 002. [Under-bed Friend]_1
Urban · Golden Dreamland
was this based on an actual game???
ch 0 7 Chapter 3: I'm Awesome, (__)!_3
Urban · Chen Tang Resting on the Moon
it was "yuan" in the last chapter & now it's "units" please choose which one to constantly use, though since we're in a different dimension/universe i prefer my suggestion of "credits". Yup, mine is best...... or maybe gild?
ch 0 5 Chapter 3: I'm Awesome, (__)!_1
Urban · Chen Tang Resting on the Moon
p.s: forgot to say I'm liking the story so far so keep going to the Author (& readers)
ch 0 4 Chapter 2: Fundamentals Can't Stump Him!_3
Urban · Chen Tang Resting on the Moon
i agree about why is the sister calling him "Mr", i also think "999.999 yuan" is a mistake (as that's actually less than a thousand with using a full stop in the middle of the six numbers & though still affordable to some stupid people) & should be changed to using a comma & a few more numbers making it IMPOSSIBLE for any player to afford to leave & and also change yuan to credits that the whole world uses ( ex: 999,999,999,999 credits [yuan] is over 999 Billion credits [yuan], or is that a Trillion?). if someone can afford to pay that......
ch 0 4 Chapter 2: Fundamentals Can't Stump Him!_3
Urban · Chen Tang Resting on the Moon
nice story so far but that's not why I'm commenting, two words are joined up (facultyalso) so there should be a space between them(faculty also)
ch 0 7 No One Believes The Truth In This Day And Age?
Eastern · Don't Let Me Stay Up All Night
nice start.... but i'm a bit confused, he wants revenge on the boar (which i kinda understand) but he was finally killed by a poisonous snake & then takes in a King Cobra amongst the other underlings?
ch 10 Chapter 10 Continuous Breakthroughs_1
Sci-fi · Crystal head
thinking e-sports should be e-games as whenever i see e-sports i imagine a gamer tapping away furiously while on a screen his avatar is running (or pole-volting etc) while competing against other gamers. i'm sorry, call me old fashioned but i always think of physical sports first when seeing the word sports
ch 15 The Unforeseen Morning Rush
Games · MiuNovels
sorry autocorrect, breaks should be beaks
ch 11 Inventory & Seagull's Nest
Games · MiuNovels
thinking that axe breaks should have a type of sealife included ( axe breaks gull/ axe breaks seal) as that would give a person a better idea of what it looks like because axe breaks at the moment give nothing for the imagination to grab hold onto
ch 11 Inventory & Seagull's Nest
Games · MiuNovels
plus it's a game
An icon representing the Bank would appear on his screen too, allowing him to access it at any time.
Games · MiuNovels
instead of halberd i think the author means trident
ch 0 7 Foraging and Fighting
Games · MiuNovels
liking the start. couple of things: his sister explains the many buttons on the helmet & then it says there's only the one (the on/off button), why do i get the feeling the guy who disappeared years ago (I'll call him "ai guy" as no name was given) is infact his father?
ch 0 5 Avatar Generated
Games · MiuNovels
just finished the first three chapters & it seems to be off to a good start but let's get to where there should be some improvements & that's the small spelling mistakes, i know it doesn't seem like much but it DOES MATTER how the story scans to the reader. its like driving down a good road & everything good, the sun's shining but there's a cool breeze that's just right with your favourite song playing & then [Kerplunk], you've hit a pothole & it's ruined that good mood you were in. Small things do matter, anyway keep up the good work, looking forward to reading the next chapters
ch 0 3 Awakening
RISE OF THE SUPREME RULER
Urban · Graviele