Ikaris_Prime - Profile

Dude I just checked and you put the wrong update on a story you added "Edge of Doom" to "the richest in DC" and I didn't get what you were doing until I saw edge of doom.So good luck fixing the story.

I was reading the chapters 68 and 69 when the MC was getting old and people around him were dieing that just awakened a fear of death in me I mean I get it he needs to die to go to other worlds but its sad seeing someone you care about die and life for a long time after you lose someone.

So I didn't read it because as soon as I read jon snow I lost interest but if he was a person rencarnated into jon snow I would have been interested.

That is the same exact think that happened to me but I was on chapter 9 when I figured it out and I was like nope I am not reading this.

Do I was reading the story and I'm on chapter 8 or 9 and it says about kakashi's beating heart and then I thought his can't be a guy on guy story right and I check the comments and next thing the author wrote is boy x boy so I'm like nope I am not reading a gay story I mean the plot is good but I like girls only.

Need grammar check and as for the harem you go with mei,sambui,ino,yugito, and mabui.Although the plot line will be long because of how to get them all in a harem it it will be worth it.

Not bad but you need a better background, longer chapters, and need to explain things better like his relationship with lydia and stiles or what all his powers can do.