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Delvogen
LV 12Just someone who hopes to have his very own successful book one day. patreon.com/Lovetoread813
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Thanks. It has been corrected.
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I owe you
"I understand, Harry, I do. I admit I need the money," Mike said with a gentle smile. "But I can't just take it without giving something in return. I'll write you an IOU. It might take me a while to repay, but I swear I will."
Ravenclaw of Hogwarts (HP)
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woot
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It's crazy, but I've been remembering it incorrectly for years.
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thanks
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I agree, Lector. In addition to that, there are numerous errors with pronouns, names, and several off-putting remarks. Furthermore, the author seems to struggle with maintaining consistency with what was written in the earlier chapters. I try to keep things running smoothly, but I'm aware that sometimes things sound off. Anyway, hope you all like it.
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Ravenclaw of Hogwarts (HP)
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They have Snape.......
During the luncheon, Dumbledore highly praised Mike and even earned 50 points for Ravenclaw, putting Ravenclaw ahead of Gryffindor and second only to Slytherin.
Ravenclaw of Hogwarts (HP)
Book&Literature · Delvogen
thanks
"Our dear Mr. Tully is quite a tough character. Not only does he have a surprising talent in combat, but he also possesses a ruthless heart," Snape said in his signature low voice.
Ravenclaw of Hogwarts (HP)
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Done, thanks.
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Thank you Sami_Alfoheday. Fixed. Also, I changed the wording so it is not used multiple times in a short time, and corrected his name.
This becomes clear when considering their head of house, Filius Flitwick. The notion that an academy primarily composed of scholars could have a combat champion as its head challenges the stereotype that Ravenclaw is merely a haven for bookworms.
Ravenclaw of Hogwarts (HP)
Book&Literature · Delvogen
Fixed. Also, I changed the wording around so it is not used multiple times in a short amount of time.
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ya, I wanted to change it. When I first started reading this I thought he ate Sirus!
They had assumed that Mike, a boy not even eleven years old, facing a large dog that stood to his waist, would try to scare it off or repel it. However, to their utter surprise, Mike had chosen to kill the large black dog and, it seemed, prepare it for his dinner.
Ravenclaw of Hogwarts (HP)
Book&Literature · Delvogen
Guess I will give it to him. He was empowering himself to fight the dog, right?
He never woke up again. Seizing the opportunity while still empowered by his magical outburst, Mike bound him to a large stone and tossed him into the river beside Diagon Alley.
Ravenclaw of Hogwarts (HP)
Book&Literature · Delvogen
I don't plan to. I have pages written (and pages more of notes) but I'm just not happy with it yet. I know what direction I want to go with my own story but I don't feel I'm up to writing what I see in my head yet if that makes any sense. I'm hoping that going over someone else's work will help.
This fan fiction is impressive, offering a bit of everything for readers. I've read up to chapter 97, and the story continues to captivate as we approach the second year. Most characters remain true to the original canon while still showcasing unique and original elements. That being said, there are quite a few problems with the wording used, mostly in the later chapters that I have read. An example would be: uses her instead of him. Still giving it 5 stars because I enjoyed a new Harry Potter fan fic coming out.
The teacher at Hogwarts is a Dark Lord！
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