kurose

I wanted to read more before I comment but there's just too much that I want to nitpick already. Honestly, the first 5 chapters gave me a lot of hope for the rest of the story. Reincarnated/ transported to a cultivation world isn't new. But originating from a modern cultivation world and then sent to an ancient one is not something I see everyday. Granted, I don't tend to read cultivation stories so I don't know how common this is. Regardless, I still find the concept pretty interesting. My problem here is with the MC himself. His personality feels a bit... off. Even though, some people might disagree, I don't mind the choice that he took after awakening in a new body. It's pretty reasonable to believe that he didn't want to say anything wrong since his mind was still confused after possessing his new body. The fear that something might happen to him if they discovered the truth is definitely more prominent considering that it might just be possible in a cultivation world. Even admitting that he lost his memories might not be as safe as it sounds, and even if it is, not wanting to take the risk is justifiable. But here's the deal. The reasoning I just stated falls completely after Chapter 6. In my opinion, the natural trajectory here would be that he continued to be timid and cautious, slowly drinking up information, before interacting with his parents or others that know him. This way, he can play the harmless amnesiac boy and not have a target on his back. Instead, he's suddenly a lot more forward, even somewhat aggressive towards his parents. Even if he did feel restrained, why would he defy his father and risk his identity being exposed just to go outside? It's like a cat suddenly thinking that he's actually a lion. That's simply the exact opposite of what he tried to achieve in the last few chapters. I have a few more gripes, but I'll just try to read a bit more before I comment further. Although the other comments are not exactly comforting, I'm still somewhat hopeful that it gets better from here.

I have so many things that I want to say about this novel. Unfortunately, most of them can be considered negative. These are also mostly spoilers, as I tried my best to power through all released chapters so I can have the most relatively complete picture. For one, the title is almost completely abandoned by now. It's only mostly relevant up until the first arc finished, where Noah already stole all of the supposed MC's harem. I suppose he is still doing the sharing thing, but the bonding system has not been mentioned for a while now. The problem here is that at best, the title is merely clickbait, but at worst, the main theme of this novel is gonna be unclear and inconsistent. The goal of this novel has transformed from the more grounded stealing harems to the more abstract pursuing perfection. This might not be a problem to some, but I do believe it is worth questioning that. Speaking of the abandoned bonding system, let's talk about the harem. There are a lot of characters that I personally think has the potential to have good character arcs, making them so much more interesting. It's a shame that almost all of them just received the bare minimum explanations on how they entered the harem and a simple mention here and there in the story. For example, we have Emily with her whole dynamic with Sophie. There's also Red being Rouge's mother and how she even dares to kill her own husband. Nephis and Aphasia's sisterly rivalry, and I guess their mom is also in the maid squad. Morgan being a vampire from another world and Zara's mom. I don't even remember the names of the other maids that he has. If you think that's all the problems that I have with the harem, then you're sorely mistaken. I didn't even get to mention how some of them just gets instantly added to the harem. Anya literally only had that one encounter with Noah at the start of the Academy arc and suddenly he is considered to be one of his women. Alice, Aphasia, Red, Emily, and maybe even others that I don't remember just got automatically added to the harem after the timeskips. My problem with this is that it shows just how fast the whole bonding system with percentage and stuff becomes totally obsolete. This is such a shame because I personally feel that it's a lot more interesting when Noah has to make an effort to get closer to the girls contrary to how nowadays and even back then with how everyone is just fawning all over him just because of his good looks. The best example here is Sophie and Zara. With Sophie, it is very clear why she loves him in the first place, as he is the one who helped her ascend the throne. And the only time that the affection level or whatever it is called dropped in percentage was with Zara, giving Noah a very rare moment of humanity that has flaws. These are only two of my issues with this novel. I haven't even explained about how there's too many timeskips, effectively skipping a lot of character developments and potential plot points. Or maybe even how Noah has almost never encountered major roadblocks, aside from the whole Worldborn thing, making the plot too predictable at times. Not to mention how there's too many characters and not enough chapters to give each of them enough screentime to be interesting, making most of them simply forgettable. Unfortunately, I don't think that I will expand more on any of these since no one is going to read this review anyway. Lastly, of course, you can certainly say that these are all subjective and that the novel is fine as it is. After all, who am I to say if you enjoy this novel or not.

Also, some more random thoughts for the author that are not spoiler-free: Where is Catnys? Is she not one of his harem even though Nathan claimed her as his woman? And where is Kassandra's scene? You can't just skip to them having a child together without it. Lastly, I am just loving Nathan and Athena together. If in the end of this volume they became enemies again, I would be pretty bummed out. Anyways, keep it up author!

At first, I was very skeptical of this novel. The biggest reason for that is Nathan himself, or how he was portrayed. When he first described himself, he does not sound interesting or deep. He sounds like an annoying, edgy teen who likes to say that he's not like the other guys. The first arc was so unbearable because of this, and I almost dropped this novel altogether. His harem is also in the same boat. I am a firm believer that quality is always better than quantity in harem stories. Nathan already has around 17 girls (the ones who went all the way) in his harem with so many more potential addition, when there is only 500 chapters released. This is very insufficient to develop all of them as an interesting character, to avoid them just being R18 fodder. I am barely touching on the characters to avoid giving too much away, but that is the gist of my reservations about this novel. That is not to say that I don't have any complaints about the plot, world-building, or other aspects of this story. They are not flawless, but the characters are my biggest concern. Despite all of that, I do think that this novel has some potential. Now that Nathan's past has been revealed a bit more, I have to admit that he is actually a pretty interesting character. It's also helped by the fact that his character and personality is not shaped by his humble brag in first-person anymore, but by the description of others. Granted, the glazing can be overwhelming at times, but this is still a major improvement. All of the women has also been very unique and charming in their own way. Despite their limited screentime, some of them has still been very memorable. That is why it is still a shame that their potential is still buried beneath all of the necessary plot progressions. I especially love volume 3 as Nathan definitely developed the most in this arc. Him actually having male friends and experiencing the reverse situation of volume 1 just gives him so much more depth. For me personally, this arc is the hook that kept me reading further. All of this is why despite all the shortcomings, my rating of this novel is still 5 star. I see that there is still potential here, especially with volume 5 more or less the same with volume 3 in terms of my enjoyment.

My pleasure. I am definitely looking forward to that arc. Lastly though, I need to really emphasize that I have already enjoyed your novel very much. So please don't let comments from me or other people pressure you too much to change your style. After all, this is still at its core your story, and not ours. Even if we do end up enjoying your novel, if you yourself don't feel satisfied writing it, then what is the point? Sorry if that last one felt high-handed. Good luck with your work, and thanks for the chapter!

This novel has been a very enjoyable experience. I wouldn't exactly say that it is perfect, but still a very solid work nonetheless. Some of the positive things that I noticed: 1. The world-building is interesting, to say the least. Obviously systems, towers, and all the other fantasy elements here are hardly original at this point, but the execution has been good overall. 2. The characters are all very interesting and fun to know more about. All their quirks makes them pretty distinguishable from each other. Other than Neraxis and Evangeline, I would say that Ariella has been really charming for me with her "minus one week" and so on banter with Neraxis. 3. The interactions between the two main couple, Neraxis and Evangeline, is really cute and heartwarming to read about. Personally, this dynamic is one of the main reasons why I find this novel so good. 4. The overall plot and progression has a lot of potential to be very good. Moreover, there has been a lot of side plots that can certainly turn into something great. Despite my praises, I also have some criticism. In fact, I might even say that the amount of my misgivings are a lot more than my praises. Hell, some of the aspects that I initially say was good is also full of some "flaws". These are my first few concerns: (minor spoilers ahead) 1. Although I genuinely believe that the plot is good, it is still somewhat all over the place. One concept or plot point may be introduced and then explored for a dozen or so chapter, but then suddenly something else got introduced and we just abruptly moved on without sufficient closure. Granted, it might become dull very quickly if for example it is too focused on the academy for a good while. However, there are a lot of concepts that sometimes get glossed over really quickly even though they can definitely be a whole interesting arc. Even if it does eventually circles around to explore more about it, I feel like this will only make readers confused and overwhelmed. 2. The harem. I feel like at this point, Neraxis should just stay loyal to Evangeline. Obviously this is not possible, but sometimes I wished that this was the case. The biggest issue here is that this novel has too many love interests for the current amount of chapters. All of them are fighting for the very limited screentime and opportunity for charcter developmet, which is so far has been monopolized by Evangeline. As a result, all the other girls just feels very underwhelming compared to the sword waifu. This is such a shame, because again, a lot of these girls are very charming. Take Celina, for example. She is, I believe, the first girl to be introduced and obviously intended to be a love interest. Her first stabby appearance was very cool and full of mystery that I wanted to know more about her. But fast forward some chapters, she immediately got outshined by Evangeline, or even Aella and Aurelia. Now I feel like she just doesn't stand out anymore among the main cast. 3. Power ups only happen to Neraxis. This is kinda related to how there are so many characters fighting for the very limited amount of screentime. This is perfectly natural for some novels. But I find this very concerning for a harem novel. When the MC is the only one getting stronger, an emotional gap between him and his harem might appear. Like he feels so different compared to his harem that a good chemistry might be harder to achieve. Moreover, it begs the question of what even is the purpose of his harem if he can handle everything. At that point, the girls will just be there for emotional support. Now for my biggest comment: the timeskip (there will be some major spoilers ahead) I find the decision to end the tournament early and suddenly enter a timeskip a bit questionable. Sure, it is not uncommon for tournament arcs to end abruptly when it has fulfilled its role. But the tournament itself is heavily linked to his revenge, which was supposed to be one of his main goals. Forcefully ending this arc without him actually achieving it just doesn't sit right with me. What makes it even worse for me is that suddenly in later chapters, this revenge is so easily fulfilled. And then to address the timeskip itself. I feel like there are a lot of missed potential with making this part a timeskip. His "Eclipse" days has been referenced so many times that this is one of the impetus that made him more of a "villain". Yet the lack of description and again, glossing over it so casually, just doesn't feel right with me. This whole timeskip just feels like a plot device to suddenly make Neraxis a lot stronger. His "death" and eventual "resurrection" was also executed poorly. If it was not a timeskip and we actually see the girls reaction to his "death", there will be a lot more drama that can be created. Moreover, if this was the case, after reading through their separation and heartbreak, and then finally getting to read their reunion, the emotional payoff would have been so much better. With that being said, as someone who never writes a novel and can only complain about other works, here are some of my humble suggestions for the author: 1. Make full-on arcs revolve only around one concept and then finish it with a climax. In the more recent chapter when they all go to the wilds, he went into the sun god tower, helped Evangeline, and fought bounty hunters. It's like having multiple arcs in one arc, which is such a shame because the wilds trip could potentially be where we can get to know more about his harem and also classmates. 2. As much as I hate to say it, stop focusing on Evangeline for a moment. Give the other girls their own arc and give them some power boost along the way. And I am not talking about a date or two, but full on important arcs. You might think that for someone who claims to enjoy the novel, I have too many complaints about it. But I genuinely enjoyed the story so far, and I just sincerely hope that it will improve a lot. For the author, I am sorry if some of my words came off a bit rude or just plain stupid, but I wish you the best with this novel and your other novels as well.

Damn I didn't think that I actually missed it. Can you tell me around which chapter was the foreshadowing for Nicole? And I can definitely believe that the first chapter was with Nicole, but was there ever a confirmation for that?