She literally said it feels good 2 lines ago why would she be dejected?
A beautiful and voluptuous middle-aged woman rocked her waist while spreading her legs wide open; it was unclear whether happiness or dejection dyed her face, but her sopping wet pussy took in the thrusts of a massive, cock with its all.
One Piece: The Ship of Lust
Anime & Comics · muhned
Infidel is probably not the word you’re looking for
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Paradise of Infinity
Anime & Comics · FanHarem
Disney owns all of us
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Entoma has a voice? She just hates it and uses lip bugs instead right?
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DxD Multiversal Gacha System
Anime & Comics · Ashtin_Pratt
Ruined another fanfic with this weak character sniping
No little boys anywhere... Meeeh.
In Naruto: Reborn with Talent
Anime & Comics · KasiCair
Best of luck to you!
Fanfics are a special genre because it’s the premise that a fan could write something more along the lines of what other fans want. But it doesn’t escape the fundamental rules of writing a story.
Ya kind of backed you into a corner on that one, don’t sweat it. It’s not a bad story. It’s fine for you to hate issei, but as a writer writing from a character perspective you gotta ask yourself these questions about the motivation of the character. Fanfics usually go sideways when too much of the writers own biases appear in a character and the character acts in a way that makes no sense to readers. It’s good to establish a character who has his own values and then follows them accordingly so the audience always knows why they do stuff and who they are.
If everyone reading relates to someone abusing their own family, you might want to pander to a different demographic.
You gotta chill on the exclamation points
My wife's sisters want me to make a harem?!
Fantasy · Sixth