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What are you going to do with Tang wulin? From what I remember from the book,didn’t Gu Yana only let Tang wulin early on because of nier?or am I remembering wrong?

For the god part,there’s been more then just tang San and Hao yuhao who became gods.For example,the other members of the shrek 7 monsters became gods,tang wutong also became a god.

He shouldn’t reveal the special abilites of his martial spirits.It would be better if he kept them a secret as they could end up as a trump card.Though,with the ability of the staff exposed,he should keep the panda special ability hidden.

Can you put the words in “” markers instead because they make the story feel more natural.Though that might just be me.Good chapter

This would have been done better if instead of 6 days,a month or two passed.This would make it seem more natural as someone getting that good is suspicious to be put lightly.

Are you ever going to do other pov’s? It would be a interestin viewpoint as we’ll get the chance to see how others view the mc,though we might have a thought of how they view him,it’ll be better to have a direct point view.Good chapter

Something you could do to improve your story later on is split the chapters,because when you’re reading this long chapter in one go,it feels like there is too much to read.

Good chapter! Though the story would flow better if you used more comas,as it gets a bit confusing to read when everything is put together.

I would assume that naruto would have anbu guarding him.He’s the nine tail jinjuriki(I defin itely butchered that) and the son of the fourth hokage.

I’m kinda confused how they got so close so fast.

The problem is,it’s unlikly his clan will teach him any of there personal jutsu,though I’m not sure of the kaguya.

I don’t understand your point.Why would you think kakashi of all people would help the mc?Kakashi didn’t even teach his own students that much and you expect him to go out of his way to teach a random kid he has never seen or talked to?

I believe the system is giving a passive growth enhancement and more might be revealed later,so it does bring benefits on top of already fueling the mc’s motivation as It was said that the reason he could continue the grueling training was seeing his stats on the screen.

I would assume the hokage would be too busy to talk to a Robson genin,especially a genin corp one.