Webnovel Author: WritingAndWriting - Novel&Fanfic Collection

that's good advice. I'll see if I can do that sometime in the next few days.

I can get that POV. I can say that this won't be the same every time we transition from setting to setting and I dislike the idea of the Benefactors being overly involved in the story, myself, so I know we won't get to see them very often.

That's a fair criticism. I work on this a bit in other sections, and there's a chapter coming up where I experiment with it a lot more, and I'd be interested to see what you think of that.

I have actually written another chronicle fix but with an evil protagonist. Funnily enough it's also a jump chain story but I mixed in other stuff and it got... messy. I was a younger, less experienced writer, and while I love that story I always feel odd talking about it. Chronicle is decently popular among the jumpchain community, and it's a somewhat common first jump, which I reflected here! I'm glad you're enjoying it, it's nice that this experimental story is doing well.

This is not a forced struggle. It's a difference in innate abilities and a sign that different people have different specialties. Plus the MC can self heal and has forcefields, and the others can definitely not self heal even if they can use baby forcefields.

That's a fair assessment. I am writing this as a self-insert so this is not the MOST EFFICIENT thing in the world, or someone making optimal plays, but a human reacting to things like a human does. Which can be a liability from a story standpoint. That said, I do think some of this is somewhat mitigated by him having meta-knowledge of his perks, specifically, which strongly address some of the plot elements here and work to significantly weaken the threats in this jump. If anything, barring the omega drawback, the perks in this jump basically kill the likelihood of the events of the movie playing out so long as someone isn't an idiot, and this character is cognizant of that and has worked to subtly use the powers granted by the perk to lower the likelihood of something bad happening and has refused to be so overt that he causes something unexpected by introducing new plot elements.

The CP is mostly to make it clear how strong a given perk is, and to help people who read the actual jumps this story uses. Also it does matter more later on when the MC begins to grow. But yeah, for now it seems... useless. That changes later on, though.

I did end up writing a glossary-style second auxiliary chapter. That might be more helpful if you want to check it out :)

I personally feel as though I have explained the perks, to the point that another reader complained about there being too much information. That said, I will do my best to summarize what is currently accessible as of chapter 5 in this comment. Gamer stuff: Jonathan has a gamer system embedded in his soul. So he can interact with the world in gamer-like ways. He can fast-travel, he can develop skills, he has access to classes (though at the start of the story he only has the wizard class). He has an inventory that he can take stuff from and put stuff in. He has a shop he can access and buy stuff from. That kind of thing. Germanic Norse Mythology: He has Loki-like abilities. He's a persuasive shapeshifter, and he can trick people into deals. Harry Potter: He can do Harry Potter magic. He can buy perks that will let him do more Harry Potter stuff, but he has no money at this point so that's just a thing he can do but hasn't. Essential Body Mod: he is good at magic. There isn't anything majorly important from there in him yet. Essence of the Dollmaker: he can turn living beings, other than plants and bacteria, into dolls. The dolls have powerful, human forms and are loyal to him. I didn't want to take hours explaining everything detail by detail. He's decently powerful, but he's very magic focused. Does that help?

What do you mean by explain? Because I genuinely feel like I do explain them here. I can't link things in WebNovel, sadly, but is there a more specific meaning you have, so I can help? Because I want too, but I do feel as though I did.

I write how I enjoy writing. If that's not for you that's fine.

I'll make an auxiliary chapter somewhat soon, probably later this week, that helps explain stuff. I am writing this on Questionable Questing as well, and over there there are LINKS and stuff that help showcase the lad's full stuff.