I think what really irks me is that you write like 8 paragraphs in between dialogue about information that is obvious to anyone paying attention. So it makes for scenes where the characters are legit standing there for an entire chapter. I really wanna like this fic but you’re losing me here.
ch 92 Ch92. Why small details matter.
Anime & Comics · KasiCair
This excessively bloated prose is just your writing style, isn't it? Well, whatever. If you don't wanna change your style, I feel like it'd be better if you combined chapters before posting. The chapters have felt incomplete for a while now. Or don't. I'm just some dude.
ch 84 Ch84. Grouchy Crouch
Anime & Comics · KasiCair
Re-read the paragraph. She is currently evolving into her third evo. I believe it was mentioned earlier that all pokemon have 3 evos in this au
With a rare smile on her stoic face Meta replied "Thanks everybody, I'll be fine." And just like that she burst into a white light just like when she had evolved into a Crustle. As she did so he thought of the dangers of evolution. In fact there weren't really any. Not like the dangers of ranking up where if you don't have the proper comprehension and try to forcibly rank up you could cripple yourself.
Anime & Comics · Firehawk81
There are two equal paths to stories, in my opinion. In column one, it is stories that are fun and enjoyable but make your brain hurt if you think too hard. In column two, it is stories that make so much sense, they force you to enjoy them out of the sheer thought that went into their construction. This story... is in column one! If you're looking for a fun junk food story, then look no further!!!
MARVEL: GAME MAKER SYSTEM
Movies · NunuXD