Webnovel Author: MiniBorkLazer

MiniBorkLazer

7mth

Replied to Word7

Yes

Supreme Magus

Fantasy · Legion20

MiniBorkLazer

8mth

Replied to ILovemyself_84

Whoops, responded with the wrong profile. For the time being, there isn't any romance planned. I may have it late in the story, but it won't be a harem.

Path of the Skeleton King

Fantasy · MiniBorkLazer

MiniBorkLazer

8mth

Replied to Tims232

Thanks for the review! I should mention chapter four introduces a rather significant change that may either hook readers further or turn them off to it.

Path of the Skeleton King

Fantasy · MiniBorkLazer

MiniBorkLazer

9mth

Posted

The story is very well written so far. The first chapter hooks you and manages to keep you engaged. I can't speak for many aspects of a normal review, such as update stability and story development, since it is only six chapters in. But as long as it continues as it is, it will be a great story.

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MiniBorkLazer

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Commented

I think you may have accidently switched from first person to third person perspective. "My vision spun and my head pounded as I slowly regained awareness of his surroundings." his surroundings --> my surroundings*

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MiniBorkLazer

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Replied to Lazy_Stellar

My mistake

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MiniBorkLazer

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Replied to Charming_liar

Noted. I did it intentionally, though.

The words wouldn't change. His eyes scanned through the letter in its entirety. Then, they did it again. And again. The words wouldn't change. Even when his eyes became bloodshot, when they tried to pierce through the letter as though to reach a hidden truth, the words wouldn't change. They were dead. His companions were dead. His brother was dead.