Should be another comma before the but
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Urban · Ella Stunner
You have a great point there! Will definitely put that on the list
Wish I could get you to be my editor. I will definitely stay up to date on your story and try to give some extra advice when I remember. Thanks a lot for tons of advice. Seriously appreciate it!
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Fantasy · Minxs
Just a flag, nothing special about it. After fighting for a long time, they no that flag is directing these humans to slaughter them. If I was reffering to the general it would be different
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Fantasy · Minxs
I dont want to seem like im nit-picking as this story has had a pretty good start. One thing I would mention, though, is the awkward sentence construction. You dont need to start almost every paragraph with “Tristan……”. Also, some sentences could be combined and split up for much better readability. Flow of the story gets thrown off by these little things that are repeated. Keep up the great work otherwise! 👌
ch 22 Tavern
Blood Elf Monarch
Fantasy · Avan