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Moments 29
ok...I've been way too immersed to leave a comment till now. gotta say, the story is engrossing so far. even the writing--though in definite need of a good editor--the talent is clearly there!!! especially enjoying more prose than usual! sometimes feel like I'm reading a script with some of these, not a written story, but this feels much closer! enjoying the main character and her journey so far, not going the typical routes in many respects, slightly 'trope-y' in other spots, but still really enjoyable!!! all encouragement to the author!!!
ch 25 Chapter Twenty Four-- Just One More (Trigger Warning: Blood)
The Villianess With A Heart Of Gold
Fantasy · Rabbit_Ramsey
Totally understand and just hoped my own unprofessional opinion can help in a small way. I know how much hard work and love goes into making a story so I hope you can be genuinely proud of all that you do and keep plugging away!!!😁
ch 0 2 Ten years back in time
Rebirth of the third rate actress
Fantasy · Bird_Of_Paradise
would like to suggest to the author to ease into your flashbacks by using bold or italicized prose until the flashback ends. I don't mind that they come in the midst of a scene but it is confusing when there is no signifier to denote the beginning or end. would help the flow, I think.
ch 10 The Heroine of the Story
Sweet Revenge: My Sweet Life With You!
Urban · LoveBerryCat
Good so far! Cliche plot but he execution is pretty good! Nice flow, dialogue is good and doesn't drag! Like the female leads current head-space and emotional responses. Not too far in but hope the author keeps the momentum 😁
ch 0 8 A Bookmark, A Ring and A Key
Sweet Revenge: My Sweet Life With You!
Urban · LoveBerryCat
only 2 chapters in so can't say too much about the plot yet. Some pretty standard backstory/plot, but the writing is decent. The dialogue feels a bit forced and amateurish, but--again--not bad! Just unpolished 😁 will continue as I am enjoying it currently! thanking the author for hard work tho!
ch 0 2 Ten years back in time
Rebirth of the third rate actress
Fantasy · Bird_Of_Paradise
Totally get the plagiarism vibe!!!! Been thinking it the whole time...
ch 65 The Mysterious Guest
The Side Character's Hidden Boss!
General · One Time
my thoughts exactly....
The man's desire for control was burning, and he had to regain it back.
Mischievous Wife : Reborn Into The Novel
Urban · YoungJhude
Yes yes!! Figure it out soon!!! Can't take this!
ch 289 Like Twins
Rebirth from the Ashes
Urban · Sweet Seven
See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola
ch 61 Your Car is Being Targeted
Reincarnation: Multi-skilled Goddess Is So Beautiful!
Urban · Prosperity Every Year
so, not too far into the story yet, but the writing is fair and no big issues. however, I would like to say that (at this point) I feel absolutely no connection to the female lead at all. I realize this is just scratching the surface of the story so far, but can't say I'm at all eager to continue. there are too many story lines like this so that if you don't grab your reader right away you will never get another chance. just my own opinion tho!
ch 10 Young Master Yi, Every Girl's Dream 2
Big Shot's Reincarnation Sweeps the World
Urban · Nalan Cloud
gotta say, a part of me is somewhat rooting for Lucas. am I bent? lol I can't help but be interested in seeing what the journey might look like if he was the 'dark horse actual male lead' she ends up with. they've got some interesting interactions and views of each of right now.
ch 142 A Sniper, That Sniped His Heart!
Mischievous Wife : Reborn Into The Novel
Urban · YoungJhude
lol strangely, I don't feel nearly as annoyed with the ML as some I've come across! at least his faults can be attributed to inexperience as well as a healthy dose of narcissism and some carelessness. however, he is not irredeemable!! he at least shows progress (though slow) in his character! I'm totally not opposed to complicated, dark or overbearing characters...but they have to grow and change accordingly. otherwise, contempt for the character can only deepen. I very much applaud the author for at least being truer to your own character set up than some!! I especially love that Julia is also changing and growing stronger! no easy-to-cave-heroine, though she worries me at times lol the writing isn't professional quality but its still very enjoyable, and made more so by the story progression. a few plot holes too, but still maintaining its charm overall. thanks for an entertaining read!
This kind of person who had his eyes above his head and overestimated his EQ would have to hit himself against a wall a few more times and be heavily beaten by reality world before he could wake up.
Mischievous Wife : Reborn Into The Novel
Urban · YoungJhude
Yes, yes, definitely ironic sentence from a 'rebirther' lol but actually struck me a moment later as being a little more profound because of it....a little bit? lol Not like she knew she could be reborn, so that is how she lived the 1st time, but still holds the same value after an impossible rebirth....hmmm just interesting to contemplate...
A person only had that one life.
Rebirth of the Heavenly Empress
Fantasy · Road of Flowers
I am slightly--strike that--GREATLY disturbed by the justification being brandished for these, let's face it, psychopathic tendencies....the ML already makes me uncomfortable....not sure there can be a way to justify kidnapping no matter what spin you try to put on it....
Thinking about it more, Zi Jue had always been respectful of her boundaries and even gave her freedom when she behaved and refrained from fleeing ever again after her only attempt. Although he did not permit Qing Shan to live in the university dorms when she entered college, he diligently took her to school and fetch her home. He always made sure he had time for her despite being swamped with work. He also made sure that she was never lacking in anything. Qing Shan's clothes were all from the latest seasons of high-end brands, some were even coveted limited editions; her jewellery was enough to feed an entire city for years with their worth in cash. Qing Shan was pampered to the ends of the earth.
The Return of the Devil's Wife
Urban · feipei
.....huh?
It's apparent that she cannot escape Zi Jue in this lifetime as well. So she will just have to live with it and make the most of their situation. After all, she knew that Zi Jue had done what he did in the past because he wanted to elicit some sort of reaction from her. He did not want a lifeless doll.
The Return of the Devil's Wife
Urban · feipei
ok, gotta say, while the whole 'video game' theme is not new, this writer already shows great promise. Too often I come across really interesting stories, but no actual writing talent to back it up. Here we have a writer that clearly has some talent, and the plot crafting also shows skill. one of the greatest rules (and most neglected on these sites) is to 'show' instead of 'tell', and here is finally a writer who is at least attempting it. It's still pretty early but I am already intrigued and pleased with this beginning. Well worth all the work you have put into it so far, author! well done!
ch 0 5 Seeds of Sorrow
The Rebirth of Evelyn Knox
Fantasy · DustyDream