Webnovel Author: Zhoa_Fei - Novel Collection

I clear my throat. "I know you'd hate this and trust me I am not liking this a single bit." I might have liked it if the situation was different though. He has such a godly face. Anyone would have been curious about other things. But right now I am so exhausted to think of anything. Anyway, I continued, " I need to do this since I don't know how much you are injured."

The Tale Of Our Love

Contemporary Romance · Altansarnai

Zhoa_Fei

16d

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This section should separated. Review it to ensure this is what you desired.

"He is a bastard for doing that to you, and believe me you deserve someone much better and that person is not him. I am not letting you have any kind of relationship with him." It would have been fine if something like this happened and I was not aware of it. But I can't let it happen in front of my eyes, I won't be able to forgive myself.

The Tale Of Our Love

Contemporary Romance · Altansarnai

Zhoa_Fei

16d

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Upon reading this story, I would notice that the main thing holding this story back is its organization and its structure. I believe that this story could have started better with the the introduction of the background of this newly crafted world. Though not everything should be divulged to the reader from the get go. Much of the information should be brought up and the futhered mentioned and expanded on in future chapters. The main character and associates background could have been handled better as well. Some of the characters could have been introduced in a different way and thus solidified the reader's recognition of them. Structure wise, there are a plethora of just open spaces peppered throughout the chapters. Most of them are incredibly unnecessary, so I recommend looking over and reviewing them. I also recommend using a different method to distinguish the characters in their dialogue. There is a story to be told here, you had 53 chapters, so that shows. Cleaning up the story would properly elevate it to another level. At this current iteration, a 3.6 rating would be fitting. World Building saves this one.

The Black Princess Chi

Fantasy Romance · Mishal_Mishi

Zhoa_Fei

16d

Commented

review this section. It could be cleaned up a bit more.

" I had been here since morning. In the morning I found out that something I placed in the conference room was missing There was the aura of a White Wolf but its scent was different from the Wolf Leader. After searching the whole island I found out that used and jade is not something that anyone besides the leaders can have. I will let go of this matter but you all should remember if this happened again then don't expect me to be merciful. Now you all may leave ."

The Black Princess Chi

Fantasy Romance · Mishal_Mishi

Zhoa_Fei

16d

Commented

review this section here.

" I had recently worked on this matter and thought of another way but it can't last too long. Anyways for the time being I would use it and I will need all of your cooperation ", she told them They all nodded.