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Zhoa_Fei

Zhoa_Fei

male LV 12

I am a fledgling author that specializes in Fantasy, Isekai and Shounen writing. Since I am relatively new to this website, then I look to hone my craft. I urge anyone to try out my flagship series.

2020-04-11 Joined United States

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Zhoa_Fei
Replied to K_Log
I shall help you out as well. I'll give your story a read as well.
Zhoa_Fei
Replied to K_Log
I appreciate your eye and bringing to my attention. Those mistakes slipped under both autocorrect and my gaze.
Zhoa_Fei
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If it is, then I recommend breaking it away from the body paragraph for better clarity.
Zhoa_Fei
Commented
I am unsure if this portion is dialogue or not. Review it.
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Zhoa_Fei
Commented
This here should be broken up.
Zhoa_Fei
Commented
Did he choose that name for himself?
Zhoa_Fei
Zhoa_Fei
Commented
This section could use breaking up as well.

I clear my throat. "I know you'd hate this and trust me I am not liking this a single bit." I might have liked it if the situation was different though. He has such a godly face. Anyone would have been curious about other things. But right now I am so exhausted to think of anything. Anyway, I continued, " I need to do this since I don't know how much you are injured."

The Tale Of Our Love

The Tale Of Our Love

Contemporary Romance · Altansarnai

Zhoa_Fei
Commented
This section should separated. Review it to ensure this is what you desired.

"He is a bastard for doing that to you, and believe me you deserve someone much better and that person is not him. I am not letting you have any kind of relationship with him." It would have been fine if something like this happened and I was not aware of it. But I can't let it happen in front of my eyes, I won't be able to forgive myself.

The Tale Of Our Love

The Tale Of Our Love

Contemporary Romance · Altansarnai

Zhoa_Fei
Zhoa_Fei
Commented
review this section. It could be cleaned up a bit more.

" I had been here since morning. In the morning I found out that something I placed in the conference room was missing There was the aura of a White Wolf but its scent was different from the Wolf Leader. After searching the whole island I found out that used and jade is not something that anyone besides the leaders can have. I will let go of this matter but you all should remember if this happened again then don't expect me to be merciful. Now you all may leave ."

The Black Princess Chi

The Black Princess Chi

Fantasy Romance · Mishal_Mishi

Zhoa_Fei
Commented
review this section here.

" I had recently worked on this matter and thought of another way but it can't last too long. Anyways for the time being I would use it and I will need all of your cooperation ", she told them They all nodded.

The Black Princess Chi

The Black Princess Chi

Fantasy Romance · Mishal_Mishi

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Zhoa_Fei
Commented
This dialogue section should be separated. The following dialogue and paragraph should follow the same structure.
Zhoa_Fei
Commented
I would recommend restructuring the later parts of this dialogue. It can get rather clunky.
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